Talk:Sway Tour/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Grk1011 (talk · contribs) 19:00, 2 July 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

(Criteria marked are unassessed)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
 * b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a. (reference section):
 * b. (citations to reliable sources):
 * c. (OR):
 * d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
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 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
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Hi, I'll be reviewing this for you. My typical style is to read through the article and make small grammar changes myself as a courtesy and I'll list more substantial comments below for your response. I will update the above checklist as we go along. I see that you are semi-retired, so please let me know if I should proceed with the review. Grk1011 (talk) 19:00, 2 July 2023 (UTC)


 * @Grk1011 Hi, thanks for taking this on! Please go ahead, I'm in my active era. Pancake (talk) 16:02, 3 July 2023 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Infobox good and proper licensing for image
 * For consistency between areas and cities being called out in the sentence, I'd suggest something like: "The Sway Tour began in September 2018 with a show in Toronto, Canada, followed by 13 tour dates across North America. It then moved on to focus on England and the Nordic countries, with 18 additional tour dates concluding with Stockholm in December 2018."
 * It would be nice to add the 32 concert dates figure somewhere.
 * Remove comma after "presence"
 * All done, I think! Pancake (talk) 15:29, 17 July 2023 (UTC)

Background

 * I understand the rationale for the tables in "shows" being split by North America and Europe, but it appears that it was actually promoted as more "international" vs "nordic" based on the first few sentences of this section.
 * I guess it was. I think it makes sense though to separate the shows into North America and Europe for the table. Pancake (talk) 15:29, 17 July 2023 (UTC)
 * It would add more context to the inclusion of the performances with Lorde and Katy Perry if you mention that those were also in support of Sway (if they were).
 * twelve -> 12
 * If you move the "Earlier that spring" sentence to be part of the second paragraph, you could start with a summary sentence like "Prior to the Sway tour, Styrke had performed across North America and Europe promoting Sway and her previous material. These performances included..."
 * Done! Pancake (talk) 15:29, 17 July 2023 (UTC)

Development

 * You could add something about club venues to the lead since that seems to be a key takeaway
 * Done! Pancake (talk) 15:29, 17 July 2023 (UTC)
 * It feels a little weird to write so confidently about the set list when the set list section further down includes "It does not represent all concerts for the duration of the tour"
 * The purpose of the disclaimer is mainly to note that the set list is taken from a specific show. She might have performed the same set at all dates, but we can't really know for sure. Pancake (talk) 15:29, 17 July 2023 (UTC)

Critical reception

 * The image from Sydney (not part of tour) doesn't seem related. Would it make more sense in the "Background" section where you talk about shows prior to the tour?
 * Removed it. Pancake (talk) 15:29, 17 July 2023 (UTC)

Shows

 * The ref for the table does not backup all of the tour dates, namely just Boston, which is a super sigh coming from me. Update: the source for the second table DOES include all 14 of the North American dates, so you can ref name and reuse that one for both tables as a supplemental.
 * Fixed! Pancake (talk) 15:29, 17 July 2023 (UTC)

Discussion
Hi. This was a good read! Let me know if you have any questions. Grk1011 (talk) 20:19, 3 July 2023 (UTC)
 * checking in since you said you'd be around for this process! Not sure if you missed that this is ready for you to take a look at. Grk1011 (talk) 14:31, 8 July 2023 (UTC)
 * @Grk1011 Sorry it's been a busy week! I'll get right on this shortly! Pancake (talk) 14:19, 10 July 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review! Pancake (talk) 15:29, 17 July 2023 (UTC)
 * I've performed a final copyedit and everything looks good! Passing now. Grk1011 (talk) 19:52, 17 July 2023 (UTC)