Talk:Sweeney Schriner/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Disc Wheel (talk · contribs) 03:46, 10 February 2013 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:


 * Lead
 * I'd suggest adding another paragraph that combines his early life and post life. When you do, I'd put the final sentence in the original lead paragraph with that new one since it relates to his life.
 * Done


 * Prose


 * "It was a fundraiser to support the family of Howie Morenz, a Montreal Canadiens star who died due to complications following a broken leg suffered the previous season."
 * Needs a source
 * The entire All-Star passage is supported by the reference at its conclusion.


 * "His hero growing up was a semi-professional baseball player by the name of Bob Sweeney. Schriner emulated Sweeney's playing style and as a result earned the nickname "L'il Sweeney", later shortened to just "Sweeney"."
 * Please provide a source to cite each of these two sentences?
 * The entire passage about how he got his nickname supported by the Podnieks book
 * Okay well put the source at the end of each sentence that uses information from the book. Use sources frequently. Same goes for the part about the all-star game above. Then I'll pass
 * I can do that, but I generally prefer not to as I feel it only clutters the page. In both cases, the passages are part of an obvious set, so the article does not switch topics before the reference. (also, Citation overkill). Resolute 20:09, 10 February 2013 (UTC)


 * Other
 * Change the section "off the ice" to "personal life"
 * Done

Lots of small changes. Easy to fix. Needs atleast one image. Disc Wheel ( Malk  +  Montributions )  03:46, 10 February 2013 (UTC)
 * They should all be taken care of. And though it isn't strictly required at GA, I have found and added an image has been added as well.  Thanks for the review! Resolute 19:58, 10 February 2013 (UTC)
 * All right everything looks in order. I didn't know that images weren't required until earlier today, so that's why I removed the comment after my previous edit. Keep up the good work. Disc Wheel  ( Malk  +  Montributions )  20:02, 10 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Heh, s'alright. Thanks again for the review! Resolute 20:12, 10 February 2013 (UTC)