Talk:Sweet Alchemy/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 04:55, 19 April 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: TrademarkedTWOrantula (talk · contribs) 00:10, 23 April 2024 (UTC)

Everybody loves ice cream! But nobody loves inflation... TWOrantula TM (enter the web) 00:10, 23 April 2024 (UTC)


 * Thanks for reviewing! --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 00:24, 23 April 2024 (UTC)

Few things before we begin

 * Not sure if we need a photo of a cookie if we can't see it. Looks tasty, though...
 * Replaced w/ image of cookie --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 14:56, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Same thing for the sign outside Chophouse Row (the restaurant photo is at the same location)
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 14:56, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Top result from Earwig says the top result is at a 33.3% similarity, though I had to turn off the search engine setting. Quotes could be shortened.

Lead

 * Isn't it ice cream parlor? Nope. It's ice creamery.
 * "or simply" -> "shortened as"
 * based in Seattle, in the U.S. state of Washington -> "...based in Seattle, Washington."
 * I prefer to add national context, but ok! ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:00, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * So Sweet Alchemy is a chain of ice creameries?
 * You could call it an ice creamery and/or a chain of ice cream shops. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:00, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * a variety of ice cream flavors and other desserts -> "...ice cream and other desserts"
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:00, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * and makes cakes -> "...making cakes..."
 * That does not seem grammatically correct to me. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:00, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * "Sauces"?
 * I've removed from the lead as unnecessary detail. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:41, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Link in-house?
 * Does not seem like necessary or helpful context to the reader. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:00, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * "daily from local farms" -> "from local farms daily" ("dairy" next to "daily" makes it hard to read)
 * Good suggestion! ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:00, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * "deemed" -> "listed"?
 * I went with "is considered" --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:00, 28 April 2024 (UTC)

Description

 * What does "small batch" mean?
 * Produced in small quantities --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:14, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Not sure why "ice creamery" links to ice cream
 * Seems appropriate to me, but removed. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:14, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * "a rotating cast of fall seasonal flavors" -> "...serving seasonal drinks(?)"
 * This is about ice cream, not drinks. Changed to "seasonal varieties". --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:14, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * an "ethos of sustainability, responsible sourcing, and relationships to farmers" -> "...that focuses on sustainability and sourcing ingredients from local farmers"(?)
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:14, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * I don't think ice cream cones are baked... then again, I haven't been to an ice creamery before
 * Cones can be baked. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:14, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * as well as cookies for ice cream sandwiches, sauces, and toppings in-house. - Terms are very scrambled here. I have no idea where the word "in-house" is supposed to go.
 * Fixed wording here. Thanks! --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:14, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Cut "In addition to the shops"; add "also" before "operates"
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:14, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Not sure why the phrase "do it yourself" is needed here
 * Removed. ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:14, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * artworks by the owner - Are the paintings made by the owner or located near the owner? (Credits to User:Tony1.)
 * Added "created" --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:14, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Wait, what does it mean when a restaurant "shares seating"?
 * Now says "seating area" --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:14, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * "has included" -> "includes"
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:14, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Unquote Sweetheart Sundae?
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:14, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * with a brownie
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:14, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Persian Rose with cardamom, pistachio, and rosewater. - Unsourced.
 * Ref 6 appears after the next sentence, but I've added an extra inline citation. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:14, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * "similar to Oreos" - So the cookies are black? I'd recommend excising this phrase.
 * Changed to "Oreo-like cookies" --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:14, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * The Jitter Bars has caramel and homemade espresso shortbread. - Is this an ice cream sandwich?
 * It is an ice cream flavor: https://sweetalchemyicecreamery.square.site/product/jitter-bars/172 --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:14, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Wait... they can use Mighty-O's donuts in Sweet Alchemy? Isn't that like, stealing?
 * The business collaborated, so permission has been granted. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:14, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Vegan Blueberry Lavender is among vegan varieties -> "...vegan varieties include Vegan Blueberry Lavender" - Wait, couldn't you just cut "Vegan" in the name?
 * Changed to "Among vegan varieties is a Blueberry Lavender flavor" --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:14, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Sweet Alchemy served and purple-and-gold-colored ice cream - Huh?
 * Changed to "Sweet Alchemy served and purple-and-gold-colored ice cream with blueberry lavender and honey" --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:14, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Why is UW honey quoted?
 * Chanted to "Sweet Alchemy served and purple-and-gold-colored ice cream with blueberry lavender and honey" --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:14, 28 April 2024 (UTC)

History

 * in the space where she had worked at an ice cream shop as a student -> "...in the same space where she had worked as a student at another ice cream shop..."
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:19, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Everything at Sweet Alchemy, from the chocolate fudge to their sundae kit, is made in-house. -> "Every ingredient is made in-house."
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:42, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * They even have a vat pasteurizer at their U District shop, which means they make their own ice cream base from scratch. For an ice cream shop, that's fairly rare. -> "The ice cream is produced with a vat pasteurizer at the U District shop." Also, cut the second sentence (sounds like it could belong in the reception section).
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:19, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * and shared an interest in sustainability - Not sure why this part is important
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:19, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * The outpost replaced Kurt Farm Shop, which was described by Eater Seattle as a "popular, hyperlocal ice cream stand" - I don't see the purpose of putting a comment here (not sure why we need to know Kurt Farm Shop's reception)
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:19, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Replace COVID-19 link with this
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:19, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * described as a "lemon blended vegan coconut concoction" with jam from Off the Rez and vegan pie crust from Pot Pie Factory -> "(Off the Rez jam and Pot Pie Factory vegan pie crust)" - Formatting consistency
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:19, 28 April 2024 (UTC)

Reception

 * Why is "scoop shops and frozen treat brands" quoted?
 * Changed to "best ice cream shops and frozen dessert brands in the United States" --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:20, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * "If there were ice cream shops as good as Sweet Alchemy near every college campus, nobody would graduate." - I'm stealing that. That's funny.
 * ...Emma banks listed (vary it up a bit)
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:20, 28 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Link gelato
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:20, 28 April 2024 (UTC)

Spotchecking
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Thanks for reviewing! I think I have addressed your concerns, but please let me know if any remain. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 15:20, 28 April 2024 (UTC)