Talk:Sweet Life (Frank Ocean song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sufur222 (talk · contribs) 09:20, 20 July 2012 (UTC)

As you're reviewing "The Don", I'll do this one for you. Overall, this looks very impressive.

Comments

Infobox
 * template needed for song length.

Lead (and reception)
 * Done.
 * Not sure if "highly positive" is grammatically correct - "Sweet Life" received very positive reviews from music critics.", or "Sweet Life" received general acclaim from music critics." reads better, in my opinion. Apply this throughout.

Background
 * Changed to "very" throughout.
 * "The Neptune's..." - should read "The Neptunes..." "Pharrel" is also misspelled here.


 * Done.
 * "Hurrican Katrina" - mispelling, needs linking and some context here would be welcome.


 * Done, added some background.
 * "Ocean accepted William's offer and the two went into the studio and recorded songs together." - should read "Ocean accepted Williams' offer, and the two went into the studio and recorded songs together." Careful of your use of and here - can become repetitive.

Critical reception
 * Done, also removed second "and".
 * the "bright 'Sweet Life'" - should read "the bright 'Sweet Life'"
 * Greg Kot, writer for the Chicago Tribune stated - should read Greg Kot, writer for the Chicago Tribune, stated
 * Killian Fox of The Observer reported that the song was one of the few times on the album when Ocean was "actively courting heavy radio play", describing Sweet Life - why italics here?
 * Amy Dawson, critic for Metro called - should read Amy Dawson, critic for Metro, called
 * musicOMH's Laurence Green praised "Sweet Life - missing speech mark.
 * "amongst the album's "essential tracks." - what album? It is mentioned earlier in the article, of course, but the context should be maintained, especially in long sections such as this one.

References
 * All changed.
 * Very long list of references which could be hard for some to navigate - I would divide up into at least two columns.
 * Ref 1 - link BBC News.
 * Ref 6 - Idolator is not a physical publication, so should not be in italics.
 * Ref 8 - full name is Nathan Slavik.
 * Ref 9 - link Rap-Up.
 * Refs 8, 32 and 38 need en-dashes.

Other
 * All done I believe.
 * No "Credits and personnel" section? I've noticed this in a lot of articles you've worked on. As I have a copy of Channel Orange, I can put this section in if you want to, but if you don't, that's fine, as you've had several other articles passed without it.


 * It's your review so it's ultimately up to you, but I'm fine with it the way it is.
 * I think we can live without it in this case as 1) You've passed articles without it before and 2) it's usually used to beef up the "Recording" section, but you've a good amount of information on this already. I Am Rufus   &bull;  Conversation is a beautiful thing.  07:07, 21 July 2012 (UTC)

Please bear in mind that this is my first ever GA article review - if you have any queries on these points, please ask me about them. I shall put the review on hold to allow you to address these comments. I Am Rufus  &bull;  Conversation is a beautiful thing.  09:20, 20 July 2012 (UTC)

All issues have been addressed I believe. Bruce Campbell (talk) 23:38, 20 July 2012 (UTC)

Looks very good, and no further issues, so passing. Well done! I Am Rufus  &bull;  Conversation is a beautiful thing.  07:07, 21 July 2012 (UTC)