Talk:Swine (Lady Gaga song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 06:25, 23 December 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 * was inspired by Gaga's → was inspired by the singer's (word repetition)
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 17:57, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * when she was 19, by an unnamed → when she was 19 by an unidentified (no comma)
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 17:59, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * Set comma after "Throughout the song"
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 17:59, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * comparing them → isn't the typo wrong here?
 * What do you mean? --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:22, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * Link bulimia to Bulimia nervosa
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 17:59, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * on Gaga, onstage. → no comma here
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 17:59, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * (along with Gaga's "Til It Happens to You") → Remove the brackets and put this after "The Haunting Ground" with a comma + add year of release for "Til It Happens to You" in brackets

Infobox

 * flawless ;)

Background and writing

 * Development of Lady Gaga's → no full names
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:03, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * her second one → you can state "her second record" here
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:03, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * which Gaga explained → state "the singer's" here to avoid word repetition
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:03, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * Gaga recalled → same as above
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:03, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * emotional therapy ... I wasn't even → ... to [...]
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:03, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * happened ... I saw → ... to [...]
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:03, 24 December 2016 (UTC)

Recording and composition

 * Bradley Stern described the music → state "saw the music" here to avoid word repetition
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:15, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * key of G minor with → set comma before "with"
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:15, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * Lyrically, the song → use "recording" here to avoid word repetition
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:15, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * comparing them → same as in the lead
 * chorus is reached with Gaga belting → chorus is reached, with her belting
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:15, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * shouting: "You're just → replace : with ,
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:15, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * pig inside..." → pig inside [...]"
 * I removed the "..." altogether. Doesn't seem necessary. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:15, 24 December 2016 (UTC)

Critical reception

 * wrote of the song: "It's a → replace : with ,
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:25, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * describing Gaga's belting of the lyrics, and the sounds from the keyboards, as reminiscent of → describing Gaga's belting of the lyrics and the sounds from the keyboards being reminiscent of
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:25, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * long... → long [...]
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:25, 24 December 2016 (UTC)

Live performances

 * one-minute "teaser" → no need of the "" here
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:12, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * Gaga's show at the iTunes Festival → State "The singer's" here to avoid word repetition
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:12, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * at the South by Southwest (SXSW) music festival in Austin, Texas → place this after "Swine" for better flow
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:12, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * then invited performance → which was followed by her inviting performance
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:12, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * reported: → reported,
 * I think we should definitely keep the colon since the quote starts with a new paragraph. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:12, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * complained that the performance → state "the show" here to avoid word repetition
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:12, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * told MTV News: "I can → replace : with ,
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:12, 24 December 2016 (UTC)


 * Gaga told Today → Gaga confessed to Today (word rep.)
 * Done. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:12, 24 December 2016 (UTC)

Credits and personnel

 * Unlink Artpop
 * Done. Now says, "Credits adapted from the album's liner notes." --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 18:05, 24 December 2016 (UTC)

Charts

 * flawless ;)

Copy-violation

 * 50.0% is WAY too much! Please look for the first two sources at the top of the list and reduce the content from them in the article's body

Images and others

 * Images perfectly illustrate the article

Links

 * No problems here!

Outcome

 * for 7 days. Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 15:47, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
 * all ready to go. — I B  [ Poke  ] 13:56, 25 December 2016 (UTC)
 * Passing! Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:54, 25 December 2016 (UTC)