Talk:Swiss Cottage Library/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 15:51, 26 August 2023 (UTC)

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the ✅ tag to state when something is addressed.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs)

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

Lede

 * Cottage Library is the central library of the public library service - can we say this without saying library three times?  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:12, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
 * ✅, changed but still a bit... meh


 * What even is a "central library"?  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:12, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
 * ✅ changed to primary library


 * Notably, the building shows... - if you have to say something is notable, it's probably not notable. Just say "the building shows...".  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:12, 26 August 2023 (UTC)


 * Are swimming baths the same as swimming pools?  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:12, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
 * In essence, yes, but sources exclusively refer to them as "baths": I've wikilinked swimming baths now so hopefully that helps.

General

 * library, Kilburn Library, was opened in 1894, but was soon succeeded in 1897 by the borough's first central library: Finchley Road Library - same issue as lede. Continuous overuse of "library" and what is a central library?  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:24, 26 August 2023 (UTC)


 * In 1989 Camden reported that the swimming baths - this is the first use of the word baths outside of the lede - how would you know these existed?  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:24, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
 * I've amended "sports centre" earlier on to swimming baths to be more appropriate, though in the whole the difference is a bit confusing, I've made an attempt to clarify it in brackets.


 * original masterplan - is this a quote or something?  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:24, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Yep, apologies, ✅


 * The construction section seems quite small - I feel it would be better served being merged with some of the other info.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:24, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
 * I've merged this upwards


 * The overall centre redevelopment plan, including the demolition of Swiss Cottage Sports Centre and construction of Swiss Cottage Leisure Centre, designed by Sir Terry Farrell, was finished in 2007 at a cost of £85 million.[9]

Whilst the accompanying sport centre's demolition was not controversial, it removed the library's complimenting twin, which was factored into new designs. - so what I read about this is that they took down the sports center, and made a new one somewhere else? I feel that could be made a bit more explicit.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:24, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
 * You're right, it was built on the site of the old demolished swimming baths and I've clarified that.


 * both locals and at a more national level.[ - "both locally and nationally".  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:24, 26 August 2023 (UTC)

Review meta comments

 * I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs)  Lee Vilenski  (talk • contribs) 15:51, 26 August 2023 (UTC)
 * , thanks a lot for taking this on, I'll have a look at reviewing one of the articles you've linked above. A lot of these sources are purely offline and I've made scans of some of them, so if you want a specific source I can send a scan if I have it. –  I s o chrone (T) 13:00, 27 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Nah, that's fine. As it's a spot check I'll just check some online ones 2,19 and 35 all came up fine, so I'm happy to pass.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:18, 27 August 2023 (UTC)