Talk:Syaoran (Tsubasa: Reservoir Chronicle, clone)/GA1

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Reviewer: DragonZero (talk · contribs) 08:56, 18 January 2014 (UTC)

Issues must be resolved for a pass. Suggestions can be ignored. DragonZero ( Talk  ·  Contribs ) 08:56, 18 January 2014 (UTC)


 * Issues
 * "who befriends Sakura, his childhood friend" The wording is awkward here. The tense is suggesting he is befriending Sakura, who is already his childhood friend?
 * "Syaoran goes on a quest to recover them, giving all of Sakura's memories involving him as a payment for travel." The second latter part is confusing for general readers. I'm assuming this is explained in more detail inside the appearances section, so you could chop off the payment part in the lead.
 * "Syaoran is revealed to be a clone of another teenager created by Fei-Wang Reed" It's implying the real Syaoran is created by Fei-Wang, which is incorrect I believe.
 * "who gives him, Fai D. Flowright and" comma after Flowright.
 * "Cardcaptor Sakura counterparts had a happy ending]" Misplaced bracket?
 * "After events of the Oto country," General readers would not know what the Oto country story arc is (I didn't anyways)
 * You should probably expand on this so readers know why the editor would say what he did. Right now, I just have to assume something bad happened to the character there.


 * "In order to make his fight scenes more entertaining, Clamp thought about giving Syaoran named sword techniques like those of Kurogane." The first part suggests this came to fruition. The second suggests it was only a passing thought. Which is it?
 * "understand him, and that some crossover characters share names and designs." The second part was added very abruptly. It also doesn't seem to add onto the reception. You might want to rewrite the sentence to fix the abruptness and to fix the second part's addition.
 * Image is excessively large. I suggest a size so you don't need a size restriction in the infobox.


 * Suggestion
 * Deadurl=no for live, archive links in citeweb
 * Fix link redirects (Found here)
 * Ex
 * http://ds.ign.com/articles/618/618242p1.html
 * redirects to
 * http://www.ign.com/articles/2005/05/23/tsubasa-chronicle-to-ds


 * Decapitalize things in the ref like "CLAMP"
 * Don't quote me on this, but if you order the citeweb to use archiveurl then archive date before the live links, the link checker won't bring up the links as dead.
 * I suggest using reflist|30em instead of reflist|2.
 * Have you considered moving the article onto the disambig Syaoran and using hat notes to redirect to the other characthers? Otherwise, it's current title could use the template display title to italicize the series name.


 * Thanks for the review. I already tried following all issues and most suggestions. Regards.Tintor2 (talk) 13:39, 18 January 2014 (UTC)


 * Added hatnote and expanded on the Oto sentence.Tintor2 (talk) 22:40, 18 January 2014 (UTC)
 * Passing. DragonZero  ( Talk  ·  Contribs ) 07:05, 19 January 2014 (UTC)