Talk:Symbiogenesis/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: OliveYouBean (talk · contribs) 06:22, 17 December 2022 (UTC)

G'day! This article looks like a really interesting topic so I'm excited to review it. I'm definitely not an expert in biology, so please bear with me if I have to ask any stupid questions.

On the whole, the article looks pretty good. It did take me a few reads of some sentences to understand what they were saying, but I think that's more down to the nature of the topic than how it's written. I'll add notes later in the table below if I think there's anything that needs to be improved. OliveYouBean (talk) 06:22, 17 December 2022 (UTC)


 * Many thanks for taking this on.... replied to all comments to date. As the holiday season is now upon us, there will be slight delays here and there in my editing. By the way, it's a bit awkward editing inside a table cell like this (and almost impossible to view on a small screen, too), so maybe put the list of detailed comments before the table? Chiswick Chap (talk) 10:41, 20 December 2022 (UTC)
 * No worries about any delays, I'm not in a rush (plus I may be a little slow myself for similar reasons). I'll move the detailed comments out of the table to make that side of things easier. OliveYouBean (talk) 04:10, 21 December 2022 (UTC)

Further notes on 1a:

Endosymbiosis of protomitochondria

The first sentence of the "Mitochondria" subsection introduces a few technical terms without explanation. Definitely need to say what ATP stands for and wikilink it, probably also worth wikilinking "metabolizing" and "macromolecule" (even though macromolecule is self-explanatory).
 * Linked and glossed.

While I don't think every technical term needs to be explained (otherwise this section would go forever and be nearly unreadable), since vesicles are mentioned a few times and pretty important I think it would help to just give a brief explanation of what they are. Maybe just putting something in brackets after the first time they're mentioned.
 * Linked.

In the endomembrane system section, I think finishing off the last sentence with "the endoplasmic reticulum and the Golgi apparatus, both being parts of the endomembrane system" would help. That way a reader isn't required to interpret the supporting image or go to the respective articles to know what their relevance is.
 * Done.

Organellar genomes

Cytosol should be wikilinked the first time it's mentioned.
 * Linked.

Secondary endosymbiosis

This sentence in paragraph 2: "A possible secondary endosymbiosis has been observed in process in the heterotrophic protist Hatena behaves like a predator until it ingests a green alga, which loses its flagella and cytoskeleton." I think this sentence is missing a word or two. It might be beneficial to split it into two sentences: "...in the heterotrophic protist Hatena. Hatena behaves like a predator..."
 * Split and edited.

That's all of my notes at this point. I'll read through again after these are dealt with to make sure I haven't overlooked anything, but otherwise things look really good. Great work on the article! OliveYouBean (talk) 05:08, 21 December 2022 (UTC)

Thanks for all of your work on the article! I've just done one last read through and made a couple of edits to fix minor issues. I'm happy that you've addressed all of the concerns I had, and I'm satisfied that the article passes the criteria. :) OliveYouBean (talk) 02:08, 22 December 2022 (UTC)