Talk:T. E. Lawrence/GA1

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Reviewer: Hawkeye7 (talk · contribs) 18:57, 6 November 2022 (UTC)

Picking this one up. Review to follow in a couple of days time. Hawkeye7  (discuss)  18:57, 6 November 2022 (UTC)

Article is of Good Article quality. Some little bits to prove I read it. One factual error.

Lead

 * Link military intelligence


 * Ottoman Empire, Arab Revolt and Royal Air Force are linked twice. Remove the second link

Early life

 * " 2, Polstead Road" Remove comma

Travels, antiquities, and archaeology

 * "He graduated with First Class Honours[28]" Move footnote to the end of the sentence

Military intelligence

 * Move the first paragraph into the previous section


 * " Lt. Cmdr. " -> "Lieutenant Commander" and link


 * "when he was commissioned on the General List" In what rank?
 * "The Bureau's chief was General Gilbert Clayton" -> "Brigadier-General Gilbert Clayton" and link rank


 * "Egyptian High Commissioner" link to List of ambassadors of the United Kingdom to Egypt

Arab Revolt

 * "300 miles (480 km)" Use adj=on to convert to adjectival form


 * "he was invested as a Companion of the Order of the Bath and promoted to Major". Do not capitalise "major" here. Could add your link and date of the Gazette (which appears later)
 * "Colonel Pierce Charles Joyce" -> "Lieutenant Colonel Pierce Charles Joyce"


 * "10th Australian Light Horse Brigade led by Major A. C. N. "Harry" Olden" Major issue: there was no 10th Light Brigade. Olden commanded the 10th Light Horse Regiment. And link to that article.


 * "General Gourand" -> General Henri Gouraud


 * Unlink Aqaba, Damascus, t Sykes-Picot Agreement (duplicate links)

Post-war years

 * Merge the paragraph beginning with "Lawrence worked with Thomas" into the previous paragraph.
 * Merge the paragraph beginning with "He campaigned" into the previous paragraph.


 * Link The Times, The Observer, The Daily Mail, and The Daily Express


 * Unlink the second instance of Lady Houston (duplicate link)


 * "'Forgive my asking, but you know everything'" Use double quotes instead of single quotes


 * "a 'wrong 'un.'" Use double quotes instead of single quotes
 * "37.5 feet (11.4 m) long" Use the adj card here


 * Move last paragraph into next section.

Death

 * Merge first two paragraphs.
 * Unlink Winston Churchill, Arnold (duplicate links)

Writings

 * Move hatnote to the top of the section


 * Merge last two paragraphs of "Writings"


 * "his brother Professor A. W. Lawrence" -> "His brother Arnold" and unlink
 * Unlink Aqaba, Winston Churchill, Robert Graves, E. M. Forster, Jeremy Wilson, George Bernard Shaw', Augustus John, D. G. Hogarth (duplicate links)

Sexuality

 * Unlink Charlotte Shaw, John E. Mack (duplicate links)

Adlington controversy

 * "Lawrence of Arabia: A biographical enquiry" -> " Lawrence of Arabia: A Biographical Enquiry"


 * "Aldington alleges" -> "Aldington alleged"

Awards and commemorations

 * "and awarded the Croix de guerre (France)" Delete "awarded"


 * "Lawrence appears on the album cover of Sgt. Pepper's Lonely Hearts Club Band by The Beatles" Move into the Popular culture section
 * Unlink Arab Revolt, Eric Kennington, Polstead Road (duplicate links)