Talk:Tajuddin Ahmad/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Whiteguru (talk · contribs) 00:38, 28 March 2021 (UTC)

Starts GA Review; the review will follow the same sections of the Article. --Whiteguru (talk) 00:38, 28 March 2021 (UTC) 

Observations

 * Lede is extensive and captures / links to important issues surrounding Tajuddin
 * Reference 5 has an invalid ISBN and cannot be accessed.
 * Late British India this section is too large and is not directly about the life of Tajuddin. Reduce this to two paragraphs.
 * ✅ To me the Partition paragraph seems to be superfluous. These days the Muslim League is exclusively viewed as a supporter of the partition of Bengal party. But the Hashim-Suhrawardy faction of the League, to which Tajuddin belonged to, in fact, sincerely opposed that move. I think I went too far in explaining that. Have removed that paragraph and adjusted the rest in three paragraphs. Hashim and Suhrawardy's opposition to the partition of Bengal is mentioned in summary in the next section.


 * East Pakistan does not reference the life of Tajuddin. Remove.
 * ✅ You are right that those facts don't refer to the life of Tajuddin. However, each of them has consequences for him and his political associates. I think removing them outright won't be the right choice. Instead have dispersed them in the relevant parts.


 * Reference 23 has an invalid ISBN and cannot be accessed.
 * Early activism: the first paragraph does not reference the life nor works of Tajuddin. Remove.
 * The paragraph The unsettled state language dispute simmering since 1947 surged in 1951 builds on the facts in this paragraph. I think I can cut it short and move it to a more appropriate place.


 * Awami League We need to distinguish between the history of East Pakistan and the life of Tajuddin. The two paragraphs commencing Pakistan framed its Constitution and Under Ayub's rule can be reduced to one paragraph. The focus is Tajuddin, his life and leadership.
 * ✅ Agreed.


 * Six points and the 1969 uprising: This section is appropriate.
 * The 1970 general election Reduce this section to three paragraphs and take the focus to be the role of Tajuddin, not the history between Yahya Khan and Mujib.
 * ✅ Agreed. Have removed unnecessary details. Still there are a few references to Mujib and Yahya as they were central in the March 1971 developments.


 * Reference 61 has an invalid ISBN and cannot be accessed.
 * Bangladesh Liberation War This section is OK
 * Formation of Bangladesh Government in Exile is a good section and narrates the work of Tajuddin in forming a government in exile.
 * Organising the Liberation War: The first three paragraphs give a military history and the resignation of Osmani, his return and reformation of the Bangla military at the intervention of Tajuddin. Precis this into one paragraph. We are not telling the history of a war, we are telling the life and works of Tajuddin.
 * ✅ Agreed. Osmani's resignation seems to be superfluous; removed it. Merged the first three paragraphs too.


 * Historical evaluation / Legacy In this section you are not dealing with the opposition of the Youth wing of the Awami League. The evaluations and points of view offered in these sections appear conflicting and present opposing evaluations of the life and work of Tajuddin.
 * It seemed to me that Tajuddin was frequently too outspoken in public. He was deeply frustrated that he had lost the full confidence of Sheikh Mujib, which he had enjoyed in the pre-1971 days. He occasionally gave expression to his frustration in public and was not very tactful.[163] ---> this statement seems to be a reversal of the general thrust of this article which paints Tajuddin as a competent person and and an insightful leader under pressure of war and respected/selected by Indira Gandhi and her government for support. The section on Post-independence career which does mention rising frustration does not post Tajuddin as a tactless complainer. Does this opinion have further foundation and support? Or is it a minority opinion? To keep this in the article, you would need to find multiple sources to finish this section with this evaluation.
 * In Legacy, the citation from economist Nurul Islam appears to give a totally opposite evaluation of Tajuddin. Both comments come from Islam on page 178.
 * References: note that there are three references that have invalid ISBN and cannot be accessed.
 * I also have noticed them much earlier. The publishers got them wrong. Don't know what to do with that.

Final Comments

 * There is an extreme difficulty here about the history of East Pakistan and its transition to Bangladesh, replete with uprisings, divisions and rule of separated territory and attendant economic discrimination which caused much suffering. Throw into this mix the internecine battles for control of the territory. It is challenging to separate the life and works of Tajuddin Ahmad from the formation of the independent state of Bangladesh as its first Prime Minister. However, the real challenge here is to tell the story of Tajuddin and not the history of the formation of Bangladesh. The article is about Tajuddin Ahmad.       --Whiteguru (talk) 22:26, 29 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Hi, thanks for the review. Have made the obvious changes. Working on the rest. --Farhan nasim (talk) 14:23, 30 March 2021 (UTC)
 * The complete film about Tajuddin Ahmad is available (for viewing) at this link. --Whiteguru (talk) 01:42, 31 March 2021 (UTC)
 * You are right. I have seen it earlier on YouTube. Do I include it in the External Links section? Not sure though if there are any copyright infringements. --Farhan nasim (talk) 06:39, 1 April 2021 (UTC)
 * I can't see what is wrong with an external link; the documentary is just that, a documentary, and while Facebook is not always considered a reliable link, it is in this instance. So External links is a good place to link to the film. --Whiteguru (talk) 07:48, 1 April 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ You have a point. Added. And hope you have watched the film; in it you meet many characters you read about in the article. --Farhan nasim (talk) 09:41, 1 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Issues resolved, GA Review complete. --Whiteguru (talk) 23:25, 1 April 2021 (UTC)