Talk:Take Your Daughter to Work Day (The Office)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 04:42, 3 October 2012 (UTC)

Will review this one!  Ruby  2010/  2013  04:42, 3 October 2012 (UTC)

Comments

 * Add links to characters in lead (Toby etc) - otherwise, lead looks good
 * In plot section, take characters out of parentheses - (Abby) -> daughter, Abby. This makes it look less odd when you have actors' names in parenthesis
 * Can you fix the paragraphs in the plot section so one doesn't look so tiny?
 * It's been a while since I saw this episode. Michael gives the children the tour after they've already met many of the staff?
 * Link rest of characters in plot section and add actors
 * Cultural references section - discuss... discuss (in second paragraph, change?)
 * lack of or arching plot - an?
 * Put categories in alpha order :)

That's pretty much it! The only image used is free use and the citations look good. Putting on hold for seven days.  Ruby  2010/  2013  04:39, 5 October 2012 (UTC)
 * I believe I have addressed all the issues. Thank you for the review!-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   00:19, 6 October 2012 (UTC)
 * Looks good. Passing for GA. Great work so far on the new season -- I have yet to watch any of it (actually, I'm a whole season behind). *Note to self, catch up!  Ruby  2010/  2013  18:28, 7 October 2012 (UTC)