Talk:Tamim Iqbal/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 10:15, 12 February 2020 (UTC)

I'll take this one on, will post review as soon as possible. Kosack (talk) 10:15, 12 February 2020 (UTC)

Initial review

Lead

 * Add (ODI) after One Day International to explain further uses of the abbreviation.
 * "played his first Test the following year", my cricket terminology is not up to scratch but should it be test match rather than just test?
 * Refs 3, 4, 5 and doesn't need to be in the lead as it's already sourced in the main text.
 * "On 23 January 2018 against Zimbabwe at Sher-e-Bangla National Cricket Stadium, Dhaka, he became the first batsman for Bangladesh to reach 6,000 runs in ODIs". I don't think we need the full date here, 2018 or even January 2018 would be sufficient.
 * "has gone past Sanath Jayasuriya's 2,514 runs at the R. Premadasa Stadium to become highest run-scorer at a single venue in ODIs", is a single stadium record especially relevant for the lead? Even so, this sentence needs a rewrote, it's moves from past to present tense and doesn't work grammatically in its current form.
 * Link T20 in the third paragraph.
 * "He has also achieved the most centuries for Bangladesh cricket side", is this not repeating the final sentence of the second paragraph?

Early life and personal life

 * The heading could be amended to Early and personal life rather than using life twice perhaps.
 * "was born in Chittagong to Iqbal Khan and Nusrat khan Iqbal, in the port city of Chittagong." This sentence repeats itself over Chittagong.
 * Is there a reason Khan is linked relevant to the subject?
 * Actually Khan is his last name, Iqbal is his father's name and he uses Iqbal in cricket while his full name is "Tamim Iqbal Khan".
 * The first and second paragraphs are rather short in their current format. These could probably be worked into a single paragraph as they are both family related.
 * Nafees is linked twice in the section, repeat links are discouraged in close proximity, per WP:OVERLINK.
 * Last paragraph is unsourced.
 * Don't disguise external links as wikilink as the article does with his daughter's name.

Domestic and T20 franchise career

 * Nottingham was not his first club side. He started with Chittagong in 2008 according to the infobox. Is there not any information on his time there?
 * "After the West Indies series 2011/12", this needs more explanation. Who did he pay for in the series, is there a link for the series?
 * "lead Duronto Rajshahi in second edition of BPL", in the second edition... Also use Bangladesh Premier League for the first mention.
 * Same with SLPL in the following sentence.

Early career

 * "a young talent of Bangladesh", there's no obvious source for this.
 * "helped Bangladesh to a historic victory", be careful with WP:PEACOCK phrases like historic. Simply describe what the team achieved, i.e. First victory over the West Indies etc.
 * "He ended up with 128", ended up reads a little clunkily. Finished the match, scored, etc perhaps?
 * "and in the process secured their first overseas series win", this already mentioned earlier.
 * "Iqbal was Bangladesh's leading run-scorer", I'm unsure on the naming customs here but I'm guessing Tamim is the correct way as its used throughout. Therefore, the use of Iqbal here is ou of step with that.
 * "On 25 January Tamim Iqbal scored 151 in a record partnership with Junaid Siddique against India", source? Could do with further explanation as to what the record was also, I'm assuming it was a record partnership against India?

Bangladesh vice-captain

 * Most of the first paragraph is unsourced.
 * The second paragraph is about county cricket. Shouldn't this be in his club career section?

Post vice-captain

 * "West Indies toured in October", toured where?
 * "a twenty20 tournament", the format has been referred to as T20 throughout so the change to twenty20 here seems odd.
 * Last paragraph is unsourced.

Post World Cup 2015

 * "Tamim played a superb ODI series against Pakistan", I'd try and stay more neutral here.
 * End of the first paragraph and the whole second paragraph is unsourced.
 * "unbeaten 103*", I'm assuming the star means not out? I'd simply state not out rather than using an unexplained symbol.
 * "This means that he could be uncertain for selection for the ODIs against Afghanistan", this sentence is written in future tense.
 * "Iqbal scored a hundred", sudden use of Iqbal again.
 * "down by the latter", I'm not sure this use works. Latter would normally be used to indicate the second of two things but there's nothing written previously that supports the usage.
 * ICC > International Cricket Council
 * "Sri Lankan legend", again be careful of a WP:PEACOCK term like legend.
 * The "In April 2018" paragraph has repeat links for Bangladesh Cricket Board and West Indies that aren't needed.