Talk:Tapir!/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Tails Wx (talk · contribs) 22:17, 23 March 2024 (UTC)

Starting review on this article! It'll take up to one week. Thanks! :) ~ Tails   Wx  (🐾, me!) 22:17, 23 March 2024 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Good work on the article, ! I have a few comments below for ya:
 * 1) Is it well written?
 * A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
 * B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
 * 1) Is it verifiable with no original research?
 * A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
 * B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
 * C. It contains no original research:
 * D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
 * No copyright violation concerns, nothing on Earwig's Copyvio Detector Tool, pass!
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
 * B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
 * 1) Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
 * 1) Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

Prose

 * Consider expanding the lead section! A two-sentence lead is too short; I suggest adding information about the band's start and their musical style.
 * Under Tapir!, "Tapir! is made up of..." – "is made up" to "consists".
 * In the same section: "While the band formed in 2019, they only began releasing music in 2022." – how about re-wording this to "The band began releasing music in 2022, although they formed three years prior in 2019".
 * Also in the same section: "They released "My God" (their first single, written during the COVID-19 pandemic)...", how about "They released "My God" as their first single, written during the COVID-19 pandemic"?
 * "performing at Paper Dress Vintage" – perhaps a bit of information on the Paper Dress Vintage would improve context at the performance venue. :)
 * "a being travelling through a fictional world of green hills" – maybe "a being travelling" could be re-worded? I'm confused as what it's supposed to mean. (And green hills mentioned? ;) )

Spotchecks
I spotchecked multiple sources, only two concerns:
 * "written during the COVID-19 pandemic" – the provided DIY magazine source doesn't verify this.
 * "Also in August 2022, they performed at Green Man Festival." – The source does state that the band performed at the festival (which I'll assume is the festival given that the source states Green Man Rising, which seems like it) in 2022, but doesn't verify the month, which is August.

Other

 * The PIAS source shouldn't have [PIAS] as it's website; just PIAS is okay!
 * Unless I'm missing something, I don't see the published date for the second DIY magazine source.
 * Five of the band's members in the given section are without sources. They are all covered in the PIAS source, so just add the sources to the unsourced members and that'll be it.

That's all I've got! I'll leave this open for at least two weeks; given that you've notified me of your holiday plans. Thanks! :) ~ Tails   Wx  (🐾, me!) 21:31, 27 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Thank you so much for the detailed review!
 * All prose issues fixed as far as I can tell - let me know if the lead needs any more expanding or tweaking, leads are 100% what I'm worst at when writing full articles :P I removed the part about Paper Dress Vintage since I don't think it's necessary.
 * As for sources, I fixed the first issue (must've just been that I put the wrong reference name) and added a citation to a Green Man 2022 review that has the date of the festival in it. If there's a better way to do that, let me know!
 * Fixed two of the other issues; the published date for the second DIY magazine source was autofilled by RefToolbar, but it's also listed on the author's contributor page with a date.
 * Let me know if I've missed anything! Suntooooth, it/he (talk/contribs) 13:46, 3 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Great, @Suntooooth! I still think the lead could be expanded a sentence or two more, once that's done, I'll be happy to promote this. :) ~ Tails   Wx  (🐾, me!) 19:02, 3 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Is it good now? :] Suntooooth, it/he (talk/contribs) 19:22, 3 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Yep! Great work on the article; congratulations on your first GA, ! :D ~ Tails   Wx  (🐾, me!) 21:14, 3 April 2024 (UTC)