Talk:Taruni Sachdev/GA1

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 09:58, 3 May 2020 (UTC)

Am going to be reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 09:58, 3 May 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
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Lead

 * "Taruni Sachdev (14 May 1998 – 14 May 2012) was an Indian child actress. She appeared in Vellinakshatram (2004), Sathyam (2004), Paa (2009), Vetri Selvan (2014), and Kya Aap Paanchvi Pass Se Tez Hain? (2008)." - how about merging these two sentences together and change them accordingly
 * "Sachdev made her film debut in 2004 with Vellinakshatram which made her endeared by the Malayalam audience." - which endeared her to Malayalam audiences.
 * "Her last film was Vetri Selvan (2012)," - delink Vetri Selvan since it is already linked in the previous paragraph and change the year to 2014
 * "which was released after her death in 2012. " - released two years after her death
 * "near the Jomsom Airport, Nepal." - near Jomsom Airport in Nepal
 * "She had studied to class nine from the Bai Avabai Framji Petit Girls' High School." - at Bai Avabai Framji Petit Girls' High School.

Personal life

 * "Taruni Sachdev was born on 14 May 1998 in Mumbai, India.[1][2] She was born to industrialist Haresh Sachdev and Geeta Sachdev.[3]" - how about merging these two sentences together for flow and shortening it a little accordingly?

Career

 * "Besides acting, Sachdev had appeared in more than fifty commercials.[1] She appeared in many advertisements of Colgate, ICICI Bank, Saffola oil, and Kesar Badam Milk.[1]" - merge these two sentences and shorten them accordingly
 * The words action thriller, drama and thriller should be delinked
 * "In 2009, Sachdev appeared in R. Balki's comedy-drama Paa.[6] Where she starred as Somi," - these two sentences are better off merged together; the word "Where" should not start with a capital letter
 * "She appeared in many advertisements of" - She appeared in television advertisements for the companies

Death

 * "near the Jomsom Airport, Nepal," -near Jomsom Airport in Nepal,