Talk:Tata Sabaya/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ceranthor (talk · contribs) 17:39, 10 August 2018 (UTC)

Happy to review this.  ceran  thor 17:39, 10 August 2018 (UTC)


 * Lead
 * Might be better to get rid of the infobox for this article.
 * "Salar de Coipasa." - worth briefly clarifying this is a lake
 * "The volcanic activity " - I'd remove "the" here
 * "edifice has been constructed by andesitic rocks" - I've been told to replace "constructed" before for anthropomorphic connotations; what do you think about using "created" or "produced by" instead?
 * "The southern flank of Tata Sabaya failed" - maybe a better link here would be mass wasting?
 * " during the latest Pleistocene " - latest Pleistocene?
 * "Subsequently the collapse scar was partly filled in with more recent lava flows and lava domes; one eruption occurred about 6,000 years before present." - was this the last eruption? If not, this last bit might be irrelevant
 * Not sure about the infobox. Used "formed", "created" and "produced by" has the same anthropomorphic connotations IMO. "Latest Pleistocene" is a common word for "between 100,000 and 10,000 (Holocene) years ago". We don't know whether there was one or more eruptions after the collapse, probably more than one though. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 18:38, 15 August 2018 (UTC)


 * Geography and geomorphology
 * "The volcano is a topic in local myths, where it is sometimes personified.[6]" - any elaboration on how it's personified?
 * "Tata Sabaya is a mountain which reaches a height of 5,430 metres (17,810 ft).[8][1]" - is it worth stating that it's "a mountain" when you've previously clarified it's a volcano? Seems redundant. Also switch [8] and [1] in order here
 * "Five lava flows extend north from the summit and display levees and flow fronts, the flows reaching a maximum length of 2 kilometres (1.2 mi); the top of these flows is cut by a collapse scar that extends east and west of the edifice in the form of scarps up to 50 metres (160 ft) high.[9]" - break up into more than one sentence
 * Link hummock
 * Would it be possible to increase the size of images in the gallery?
 * Not sure how to word an explanation of the personification; apparently Tata Sabaya may be the father of a certain "Capurata". Got the others. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 18:38, 15 August 2018 (UTC)


 * Geology
 * "Based on research several phases of tectonic and volcanic activity have been identified in the Central Volcanic Zone." - not sure what "based on research" adds here, I think that's implied
 * Link Porphyritic
 * Clarify what mafic means (parenthetical should be fine)
 * Done. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 18:38, 15 August 2018 (UTC)


 * Climate and vegetation
 * any more on this?
 * Quantitative estimates or averages available at all?
 * I don't think so. Tata Sabaya like most Bolivian volcanoes is very poorly studied. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 18:38, 15 August 2018 (UTC)


 * Eruption history
 * " The young age of the mountain has been inferred from the lack of moraines[8] and glaciation on the mountain, " - might make logical sense to switch glaciation and moraines, since glaciers precede moraines? Just a thought
 * Think you want a different link for fallout, not nuclear fallout :)
 * Got the first. For whatever reason, we only have an article for the nuclear version. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 18:38, 15 August 2018 (UTC)


 * References
 * Earwig's tool checks out
 * Ref 11 should not be in all caps
 * Anything the GVP site can add content-wise?
 * Done. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 18:38, 15 August 2018 (UTC)


 * Images
 * Everything in the gallery is definitely CC? Does the journal clarify this somewhere on its website? (I can read Spanish fairly well)
 * At the bottom of the page it says Todo el contenido de esta revista, excepto dónde está identificado, está bajo una Licencia Creative Commons with a link to this permitted license and no indication that these images are exempted. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 18:38, 15 August 2018 (UTC)

good work. Should be easy to fix these concerns.  ceran  thor 17:49, 15 August 2018 (UTC)
 * Got these. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 18:38, 15 August 2018 (UTC)
 * I tweaked the fallout to link to volcanic ash. Otherwise, happy to pass this.  ceran  thor 18:52, 15 August 2018 (UTC)