Talk:Telepathy (song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 12:00, 3 November 2016 (UTC)

Thanks, but do you think this is a good idea? — Calvin999 12:05, 3 November 2016 (UTC)
 * What do you mean? Carbrera (talk) 12:25, 3 November 2016 (UTC)
 * Given that I was involved in pointing out the reviews that you and others were involved in, and now you're reviewing one of mine. I'm grateful, but others have been waiting weeks, months. This has been up for a few hours. — Calvin999  15:32, 3 November 2016 (UTC)
 * I took up this review because I'm familiar with the subject matter and would like to give the article a decent review. If you have no other objections, I will proceed with it shortly. Carbrera (talk) 03:50, 4 November 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

 * The single cover image is too large; 300 x 300 px will do so add a non-free reduce to the file page
 * ✅ — Calvin999  10:31, 7 November 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 * The leading statement might be a bit incorrect; although Aguilera may have written songs in the past, she didn't write this one so "songwriter" should be removed
 * It's not really because it's her occupation, she is a songwriter 'by trade' as well as a singer. It has no impact that she didn't write this song specifically. — Calvin999  10:36, 7 November 2016 (UTC)
 * Not that this means anything, but I own two albums that include work produced by Hermansen & Eriksen and they are generally credited without their middle names; I checked the sourcing and neither of them included "Storleer" nor "Erik" so I would remove them in all cases, including the previous infobox and in the prose below
 * They are credited as such on Tidal in the source. — Calvin999
 * Should the producers of the track be listed here too?
 * ✅ — Calvin999
 * You state the year several times, which isn't necessarily an issue, but to change things up a bit you could state "of the same year" or along those same lines
 * ✅ — Calvin999
 * Perhaps include "accompanying" before "TV series"?
 * I don't think it's necessary. — Calvin999
 * "respecitvely" → "respectively"
 * ✅ — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>
 * "As a thank you gift to her fans, radio and DJs for playing the track and making it number-one on the chart" → This sounds confusing to me as it is lacking a serial comma; I would suggest adding one after "radio"
 * ✅ — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>

Background and release

 * References #1/2 do not back up what is being said in the leading statement
 * How so? Because both sources are as clear as day in what is in the first sentence here. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  10:39, 7 November 2016 (UTC)
 * "Rodgers is credited as a featured artist and the theme of the series." → "and the theme of the series"?
 * Yes, the disco theme. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>

Composition

 * "House of LaBeija" → Maybe link it to Pepper LaBeija here
 * ✅ — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  10:40, 7 November 2016 (UTC)

Response

 * I believe the third paragraph is long enough (especially compared to the "Composition" section) to deserve a separate header under something like "Chart performance"
 * ✅ — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  10:43, 7 November 2016 (UTC)
 * You could probably mention that it charted at #31 on Billboard's Twitter Top Tracks chart in August, although it shouldn't be listed under the "Charts" section
 * I couldn't see it on her chart history or on a google search of her recent Billboard articles. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  10:43, 7 November 2016 (UTC)
 * ❌ Try this instead Carbrera (talk) 02:50, 17 November 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  09:08, 17 November 2016 (UTC)

Music video

 * The Get Down → Should be italicized
 * ✅ — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  09:12, 17 November 2016 (UTC)
 * Billboard → Should be italicized
 * ✅ — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>
 * "Writing for Billboard" → Link Billboard since it has it's first instance here
 * No because it's linked in the previous section. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>
 * You use "wrote that" three times in a row in the second paragraph, so I'd change it up a bit
 * ✅ — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  09:12, 17 November 2016 (UTC)

Formats and track listings

 * From what I've seen on Wikipedia, its inclusion on an album is generally not listed here so I would recommend removing it
 * I would normally agree, but given that this is from a various artist soundtrack album, and not a personal studio album, it is a standalone song in a sense. It is also not included on either of the other two formats, and is different from them. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  10:45, 7 November 2016 (UTC)

Credits and personnel

 * Same thing regarding middle names as I previously mentioned in the lead/infobox above
 * Same as above. — <b style="color:#595454">Calvin999</b>  10:45, 7 November 2016 (UTC)