Talk:Television Romance/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 05:01, 26 October 2021 (UTC)

I'll look at this tomorrow when I am more awake! —  Ghost River  05:01, 26 October 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lede

 * Mention the actual release date in the first sentence, not just the year
 * Commas rather than em dashes in the first paragraph
 * " which was written by"
 * First sentence of the second paragraph is incongruent with the body; the double A-side release was in November
 * "whereas" "while" (whereas implies a differing opinion)
 * "#83" "number 83"
 * "#2" "number 2"
 * These are all done.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  14:23, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Composition and production

 * mention that Doran and Baron-Gracie are from the band Pale Waves
 * Ambient Light should be italicized
 * "ironically, some listeners assume the song is a love song" "some listeners incorrectly assume that "Television Romance" is a love song"
 * Link Matthtew Healy up here in the second paragraph
 * "after his manager, Jamie Oborne (who also managed Pale Waves), played Healy" "after Jamie Oborne, who managed both the 1975 and Pale Waves, played him"
 * Remove the parentheticals in the third paragraph and just make that a new sentence
 * Some MOS:LQ issues throughout; punctuation like commas and periods should always be on the outside unless you're quoting a complete sentence
 * Minus the MOS:LQ issues, these are all done as well.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  14:23, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Music video

 * Should ideally be after the "Release" section since the video came out later
 * Delink Matty Healy, should be linked above
 * "co-directed by Matty Healy (making this his directorial debut) and Samuel Burgess-Johnson" "co-directed by Samuel Burgess-Johnson and Matty Healy, with the latter making his directorial debut."
 * ""She had no clue what was going on but she was loving it,"" ""She had no clue what was going on but she was loving it"," per MOS:LQ
 * The YouTube views seem somewhat trivial unless it broke a record
 * "nominated for an NME Award for Best Video at the NME Awards 2018" "nominated for Best Video at the 2018 NME Awards"
 * Comma after "on 14 February"
 * Alternative Press also reviewed the video here
 * These should be done.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  14:34, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Release

 * A better source than Amazon should be used for the release date; try this from DIY
 * Done.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  14:24, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Reception

 * Upon its release
 * "critics" "music critics", and link to Music journalism
 * Comma after "writing for NME"
 * ""a shimmering, summer-tinged indie banger."" ""a shimmering, summer-tinged indie banger"." per MOS:LQ
 * ""the song's heavenly chorus,"" ""the song's heavenly chorus"," per MOS:LQ
 * ""allows the Manchester quartet to elevate into a league of their own."" ""allows the Manchester quartet to elevate into a league of their own"." per MOS:LQ
 * No comma after "Clash writer Robin Murray"
 * ""a sugar-sweet ear-worm of a track."" ""a sugar-sweet ear-worm of a track"." per MOS:LQ
 * What makes The VPME a reliable source?
 * More MOS:LQ stuff all through this section
 * "for sounding very similar to" "for its similarities to"
 * "Some critics" are mentioned, but then only one is referenced
 * Minus the MOS:LQ issues, these are all done.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  14:35, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Addendum

 * The year-end lists and awards and nominations should be in prose, since the former only has three and the latter has one. See something like "Uncomfortable"
 * Additionally, there should be a section called "Commercial performance" that talks about chart history; this is in addition to, not instead of, the charts below
 * Done. And since there wasn't a lot to talk about with regard to the single charting, I just added a blurb to the "Release" section.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  14:39, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Track listing

 * Incomplete - no credits given in the parameters, no citations, and no total runtime
 * How is it now?-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  14:34, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Charts

 * Table should have a title/caption per MOS:TABLECAPTION
 * Added.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  14:24, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Release history

 * Table should have a title/caption per MOS:TABLECAPTION
 * There should be citations for both of these releases
 * "DL" should link to music download, and LP to gramophone record
 * Done.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  14:28, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

General comments

 * Images are either Creative Commons or are fair use, and all are relevant
 * No stability concerns in the revision history
 * Earwig score looks good
 * Article is missing a Personnel section with music and production credits
 * Added personnel section.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  14:30, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Putting on hold to allow nominator to address comments. Feel free to ping me with questions, and let me know when you're finished. —  Ghost River  19:26, 27 October 2021 (UTC)
 * How do these changes look to you?-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  14:44, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Much better! I've fixed a number of small issues that came up, and now I think that this one is ready to go! —  Ghost River  01:21, 31 October 2021 (UTC)