Talk:Temple Israel (Dayton, Ohio)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: -- ThinkBlue   (Hit   BLUE)  19:40, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

-- ThinkBlue   (Hit   BLUE)  19:40, 26 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the thorough review. In response to the issues raised:
 * "After meeting in rented quarters, it purchased its first building", who purchased it?
 * The congregation. I've clarified.
 * Check. -- ThinkBlue   (Hit   BLUE)  01:01, 1 March 2010 (UTC)
 * Same section and in the Recent events one, "As of 2010, the rabbis were David M. Sofian and Karen Bodney-Halasz" shouldn't it be ---> "As of 2010, the rabbis are David M. Sofian and Karen Bodney-Halasz"?
 * I always put these in the past tense, as 2010 soon becomes 2011; this way it doesn't have to be adjusted. I've changed it to the present tense, though, but please let me know which you prefer.
 * The one in the lead and in the section work fine.
 * In the The early years, at 4th and Jefferson section, "The Society met daily for prayers in rented rooms: first above a shop in the old Dayton Bank Building (later Steele High School, since demolished)", the high school was demolished or the bank building? I found it confusing.
 * The Bank Building was converted to a High School, which was since demolished. I've re-worded to try to clarify.
 * Much better.
 * Also, I'm having a hard time understanding who "it" is. (Ex: "There it purchased for $1,500".)
 * Kehillah Kodesh B'nai Yeshurun. I've clarified.
 * Check.
 * In the Move to Reform, and early rabbis section, is this correct ---> Godfrey/Gottheil?
 * Yes, he went by both names. His original German name was no doubt Gottheil, which he anglicized to Godfrey upon coming to America. However, he used both names while in America.
 * Just needed to know.
 * In the Salem and Emerson building, "when the congregation moved to new building", "a" is missing between "to" and "new".
 * Fixed, thanks.
 * You're welcome. :)
 * In the New sanctuary during Selwyn Ruslander's tenure section, "Witt retired in 1947, and Selwyn D. Ruslander succeeded him" ---> "Following Witt's retirement in 1947, Selwyn D. Ruslander succeeded him", something like that, you know.
 * Wording modified accordingly.
 * Check.
 * Throughout the article, please link "Odd Fellows" and "College of the City of New York" to their correspondence articles.
 * I believe they are; have I missed any?
 * IDK, cause I have a feature that I use that can detect disambiguations. I ran it again and it says that there are two disambiguations found. Are they linked correctly?
 * D'oh! I didn't understand what you meant. Fixed now. Jayjg (talk) 01:33, 2 March 2010 (UTC)
 * Check. -- ThinkBlue   (Hit   BLUE)  15:52, 2 March 2010 (UTC)
 * In the New sanctuary during Selwyn Ruslander's tenure section, why are there parentheses around WWII?
 * it was around "during World War II", but another editor has modified the text to replace the parentheses with commas, which I think works better.
 * Check.
 * Jayjg (talk) 06:15, 28 February 2010 (UTC)
 * You're welcome for the review. -- ThinkBlue   (Hit   BLUE)  01:01, 1 March 2010 (UTC)
 * Thank you to Jayg for getting the stuff I left at the talk page, because I have gone off and placed the article as GA. Congrats. ;) -- ThinkBlue   (Hit   BLUE)  15:52, 2 March 2010 (UTC)
 * Thank you! Jayjg (talk) 02:06, 3 March 2010 (UTC)