Talk:Teresa Billington-Greig/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 08:22, 7 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments
 * "the WSPU (Women's Social and Political Union)" other way round first mention, i.e. the Women's Social and Political Union (WSPU)
 * "appointed by the Women's Social and Political Union (WSPU) as a travelling..." umm.. just use the unlinked abbreviation here.
 * Probably worth contextualising who H. H. Asquith was for readers who may not be aware that he was nearly the PM at that time.
 * "She died of cancer on 21 October 1964" unless somehow notable, we don't normally "do" deaths in the lead.
 * "at The Women's Library' The isn't part of the title.
 * "Lancashire on 15' comma after Lancs.
 * "subsidisdised" I say, what?
 * Could link Blackburn (since you linked Preston).
 * "school aged 13, became an" +she.
 * "hatmaking trade" isn't that more encyclopedically known as millinery? Or hat-making.
 * in Manchester.[4] In Manchester" repetitive. And link perhaps.
 * "the Manchester University" well, either no "the" or (preferably), the University of Manchester.
 * Amended to "studying at the University of Manchester Settlement" with no wiki-link, as the Settlement seems to be distinct from the associated University. (see here and here.) BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 14:29, 7 September 2021 (UTC)


 * "a travelling speakers" just one.
 * "the Labour Party[9] " full stop.
 * "outside of H. H. Asquith's home" see above.  Even just British member of parliament?
 * Amended to include "Chancellor of the Exchequer" here and in the lead. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 14:29, 7 September 2021 (UTC)


 * "1875/6"1875/76.
 * "the Liberal" link.
 * Amended to "the Liberal Party" BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 14:29, 7 September 2021 (UTC)


 * Was the Huddersfield by-election this one? Could link.
 * "1907, Emmeline Pankhurst suspended" overlinked.
 * "the billiard company" link billiard.
 * Amended and linked. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 14:29, 7 September 2021 (UTC)


 * Why sub for her husband in 1923?
 * Sources I've seen don't say why. McPhee & FitzGerald say it was "shortly after the family moved to London" but no further details; ODNB only mentions it in passing. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 14:29, 7 September 2021 (UTC)

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 12:38, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
 * " the Second World War " you just had World War I, so be consistent.
 * "Her articles critical" +were
 * "then common (attacks on property, for example), " -> "then common, such as attacks on property,"
 * "held at The Women's Library" the Women's Library.
 * Link and italics for Oxford Dictionary of National Biography.
 * "p.295 " p. 295.
 * Ref 4, en-dash.
 * Ref 6 too, and pp.
 * ref 11, en-dashes, not spaced hyphens.
 * Ref 15 en-dash.
 * Check all other page ranges are separated by en-dash.
 * ISBNs could use consistency.
 * Many thanks, . I've amended the article in line with your review comments, with notes on a few points above. Let me know if anything else is required. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 14:29, 7 September 2021 (UTC)