Talk:Teresa Cheng

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Hi. I peer reviewed your article. I thought the introduction paragraph was good. I noticed you just have a big chunk of text under the title biography, so I think you should split it up into "Personal Life" and "Career" section. That way, you can add more information under personal life like dates and family life. I made some minor edits with commas on the page. I hope I could be of help! PSankaran (talk) 00:46, 16 November 2015 (UTC)PSankaran

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Hyperlinks
I think there are certain words that may be unbeknownst to the reader, by adding hyperlinks to these words could greatly improve the readers understanding of Teresa Cheng's work.

Below are some examples of undefined words and their respective wiki links: "Lucasfilm"- https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Lucasfilm "DreamWorks U.S."- https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/DreamWorks "Rhythm and Hues" - https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Rhythm_and_Hues_Studios

Sarahq786 (talk) 01:06, 16 November 2015 (UTC)

Subsections
The article is hard to navigate as the majority of the writing is under one broad subsection titled "Biography". The article could be made more accessible to the reader by breaking up the content into subsections. For example if you took the information underneath "Biography" and broke it up by the headings "Early Life", "Education", "Film Career", and "Awards/Nominations" I think the reader would be able to transverse the information more efficiently.

Sarahq786 (talk) 01:06, 16 November 2015 (UTC)

Personal Life
I think information regarding Teresa Cheng's personal life would create a more rounded view of the filmmaker for wikipedia users. Looking for information regarding Cheng's parents, any romantic relationships, children, or hobbies would work to flesh out the article.

Sarahq786 (talk) 01:07, 16 November 2015 (UTC)

Minor change
This is more of a preference but in the sentence "She has worked with some major agencies such as..." the "some" could be taken out. It makes the sentence a bit too wordy.

The sentence "Since the start of her career, Cheng has had 20 years of experience within both the film and commercial industry" is also a bit wordy and confusing. Maybe change it to, "Previous to the beginning of her career, Cheng had had 20 years of experience within both the film and commercial industry"

--Ineagoe (talk) 01:04, 16 November 2015 (UTC)

Links
Some of the terms included in this article should include links to further elaborate; it is better to over explain things even if it may seem obvious to the writer. I listed the terms that I thought require a link:

"Communications" Some people may not be aware of what Communications is.

"Bachelor of Arts"

"Lucasfilm"

"DreamWorks U.S."

"CBS"

"Seattle" and "Washington" Hong Kong is internally linked previously to the mention of Seattle and Washington. To maintain this pattern of linking locations, it might be useful to include links for the others as well.

--Ineagoe (talk) 01:09, 16 November 2015 (UTC)

Opinion
While to some it may seem like Cheng is knowledgeable about the studio, facility business, and global aspects of the animation industry, others may differ. The sentence, "She is knowledgeable about the studio..." appears opinion-based. Maybe change the sentence to include "due to" at the end and list reasons why. Or, say "Her work in XYZ and her contributions to XYZ have granted her expansive knowledge regarding the studio, facility, business, and global aspects of the animation industry". --Ineagoe (talk) 01:16, 16 November 2015 (UTC)

Peer Review
Hello, I peer reviewed your article and I thought it was great! As everyone else has been saying, I do agree that you should attempt to break up the biography text into multiple subsections such as Early Life, Career and Awards/Nominations. This would make the article appear more inviting to a visitor and easier to read and separate the information. I suggest that you combine certain sentences such as "Cheng has occupied many leadership roles" and her listed positions. I also added a few hyperlinks for you to help provide information with certain terms. Once again, great job! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bmyrga (talk • contribs) 03:47, 17 November 2015 (UTC)