Talk:Terra (Kingdom Hearts)

Refurbish the article
Looking over the articles for the Birth by Sleep protagonists, I feel they contain a few too many issues to meet "Good article" standards. I will currently go over the issues I found with this article; I'll go over the other two when I can.


 * Appearances
 * "The Lingering Will fights the game's protagonist Sora upon sensing Sora's Keyblade and mistaking Sora for Xehanort and acknowledges Sora as a Keyblade Master afterward."
 * This is a run-on sentence, and the part about acknowledging Sora as a Keyblade Master seems inaccurate in light of the English release of Kingdom Hearts II Final Mix.
 * "Informing Terra and Aqua about the Unversed and Master Xehanort's disappearance, Eraqus orders the two to eliminate them and find Xehanort."
 * This fails to specify who "they" are.
 * "During his quest, he interacts with several Disney characters for information on his whereabouts..."
 * While it's already implied, this could use some extra specification.
 * "...and faces inner darkness."
 * This character struggle could be better described.
 * "Terra returns to the Land of Departure, saves Ventus and fights with Eraqus. They fight until Terra sees Xehanort vanquishing Eraqus and revealing his plan.
 * Apart from the boldface redundancy, it fails to acknowledge what Terra is saving Ventus from or why he is fighting with Eraqus.
 * "...Terra unleashes the darkness power and Xehanort takes over his body"
 * This could be worded better.
 * "At Radiant Garden, Xehanort, still possessing Terra's body, sends Aqua into the Realm of Darkness."
 * Aside from being rather inaccurate, this shifts the focus from Terra to Xehanort when it seems better off to mention that Xehanort remains in possession of Terra's body.


 * Reception
 * "...players may know little about them due to their role in Kingdom Hearts II, but with Birth by Sleep, players will able to know about them." / "...he did not understand the importance of him and the other characters being briefly featured in Kingdom Hearts II, although it could be explained once the player finishes Birth by Sleep."
 * These could be reworded for redundancy.

Overall, the summary of Terra's role in Birth by Sleep reads more like it was based on one third of the main article's plot synopsis, rather than the character arc within the game itself. This gives the article a very fragmented feel. I'm not suggesting we fill the gaps with more details, but rather that we restructure the entire section to give it more balance and bring the character's role into focus, all while trying to keep the general length. I also feel that it should also make mention of Terra's scene with Riku, which would give a little more credence to the header's mention of their connection, rather than just keep it tucked away in the "Creation and development" section. Also, be mindful of in-game quotes; for example, one of the quotes involving Terra and Eraqus' apology doesn't really make sense when tying it to the scene that directly follows it. Don't be afraid to add, remove, and adjust quotes as necessary.

I'll start working on rewriting this as soon as I am able to. In the meantime, please consider these points for any future edits. User:SubZeroSilver (talk) 04:19, 28 October 2016 (UTC)

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