Talk:Terry Conroy/GA1

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 13:18, 9 June 2016 (UTC)

Hi! I will be reviewing this in the next few days. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 13:18, 9 June 2016 (UTC)

Fairly well-written, only a few comments: Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 14:41, 9 June 2016 (UTC)


 * Lead
 * in a 14-year career in the Football League It may be helpful to give the years he was active in a (x–y) form here. Something similar may look good near a seven-year international career.
 * OK, done.--EchetusXe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)
 * You can add "Irish club" before "Glentoran" as you have done for Waterford.
 * I'd say it's not needed as it goes on to say he won the Irish Cup and Irish League with Glentoran, but its up to you.--EchetusXe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)
 * distinctive appearance of pale skin and bright ginger hair and sideburns Maybe shorten this to "distinctive pale skin, bright ginger hair and sideburns"? (Also in "Style of play")
 * Ah good thinking.--EchetusXe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Does "insurance" need a link? (Also in "Personal life")
 * Done.--EchetusXe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)


 * Ireland
 * When you begin with the main article, you should write the full name of the person
 * Done.--EchetusXe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)
 *  two jobs as a factory worker  "...two jobs: as a factory worker..."
 * Done.--EchetusXe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Does "housekeeping" need a link?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)
 *  he was too small Too "young" if it refers to age, or "short" if it refers to height?
 * I'd say bulk would also be included, but probably mainly height.--EchetusXe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)


 * Stoke City
 * A few images would give this a more interesting look.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)
 * "Friendly" may be appropriately wikilinked.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)
 * more cartilage in his knees "from" and not "in", I think
 * Probably yeah.--EchetusXe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)
 * "John Mahoney" is a duplink
 * Done.--EchetusXe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)


 * Later career
 * Name his autobiography
 * Done.--EchetusXe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)


 * International career
 * Both of these games...France finished third. Source?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Duplinks: Shamrock Rovers and XI, Lansdowne Road
 * Done.--EchetusXe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)


 * Style of play
 * Italics for "Daily Express".
 * Done.--EchetusXe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)
 * "Victoria Ground" is a duplink, but linking it may be relevant here
 * Done.--EchetusXe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)


 * Personal life
 * Begin section with "Conroy".
 * Done.--EchetusXe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)


 * Honours
 * Source for the last point?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)

No copyvio detected. Will check sources later. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 15:26, 9 June 2016 (UTC)
 * OK, thank you for the comments. I have found them useful.--EchetusXe 20:47, 9 June 2016 (UTC)

Alright, done with the above issues. Moving on to sources: Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 11:19, 10 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Assuming good faith for offline inaccessible sources.
 * Page ranges for refs 1 and 11?
 * I've asked the guy with those books to add them.--EchetusXe 17:52, 10 June 2016 (UTC)
 * I expect each point in the infobox is sourced, there or somewhere else in the article?
 * Yeah: birthplace and date, height, position, stats.--EchetusXe 17:52, 10 June 2016 (UTC)
 * A note on the top of the section "International" saying ref 7 supports everything in it would be helpful, as in the preceding section.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:52, 10 June 2016 (UTC)
 * It is better to name the publisher properly whenever you can, instead of using the website name. For example, you can say Rec.Sport.Soccer Statistics Foundation instead of rsssf.com (ref 59)
 * Done.--EchetusXe 17:52, 10 June 2016 (UTC)

Great, can be promoted now. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 08:48, 11 June 2016 (UTC)