Talk:Tetricus I/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Argento Surfer (talk · contribs) 20:08, 19 January 2018 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria You can start addressing any points I raise immediately, but I will be offline until Monday. If you disagree with any of my comments, don't hesitate to argue them - I'm willing to be persuaded. Once complete, I'll be using this review to score points in the 2018 wikicup. Argento Surfer (talk) 21:26, 19 January 2018 (UTC)
 * 1) Is it well written?
 * A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
 * Lead
 * "the murder of Victorinus" - suggest "the murder of Emperor Victorinus" for clarity.
 * "by the influence of Victoria, the mother of Victorinus" - I think "by the influence of Victorinus' mother, Victoria." reads more smoothly
 * History
 * "before Emperor Victorinus was murdered" - I think "when Emperor" sounds better.
 * "After Victorinus was murdered, his mother, Victoria" - "Victroninus' mother, Victoria," avoids repeating "Victorinus was murdered"
 * "elevated to co-emperor during the last days of Tetricus I's reign, but this is disputed" - by whom and why?
 * Source didn't give me that unfortunately. Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  22:06, 19 January 2018 (UTC)
 * "one reaching so far into Gallic territory as to reach the Loire." - repetition of "reach". Maybe change the first instance to "stretching"?
 * "There are two accounts of the occurences there." - the second one is attributed to "modern scholars", but the first is left vague. Is that the contemporary account?
 * "modern scholars believe this to be imperial propaganda" from which empire?
 * "coins of Tetricus I and II, to " - comma not needed
 * Numanistics
 * Most of these sentences contain the phrase "his bust on the obverse". I think it would be more engaging to remove this repetition with something like, "seven featured his bust on the obverse, with the reverse showing a __, __, ... or a ___." Same with the coins with his face.
 * " depicted Tetricus I and Tetricus II, his son, together" - "his son" isn't needed. Lineage was established in the previous section.
 * "Jugate busts of both on the obverse" is repeated twice. I suggest combining these sentences.
 * B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
 * no concern
 * 1) Is it verifiable with no original research?
 * A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
 * no concern
 * B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons&mdash;science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:
 * assuming good faith for the print sources. I re-ordered some to put them in numeric order.
 * C. It contains no original research:
 * AGF that the "debated" is supported by the offline sources.
 * D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
 * ear wig returned a 1% hit on a brief latin phrase
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
 * no concern
 * B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
 * no concern
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
 * The "debated" aspects are being presented with equal weight. AGF the offline sources support this weighting.
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
 * other than recent improvement, there have been few changes in years.
 * 1) Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * no concern
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * no concern
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Short but sweet. Pass pending response to the notes above. Argento Surfer (talk) 21:49, 19 January 2018 (UTC)
 * Done. Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  22:16, 19 January 2018 (UTC)
 * Nice work - easy pass. Argento Surfer (talk) 13:57, 22 January 2018 (UTC)
 * Did a cheeky little ce, auto ed, checked for dupe wikilinks and changed date to year in the biblio; all edits suggestive, rv as desired. Regards Keith-264 (talk) 13:01, 8 March 2018 (UTC)
 * 1) Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * no concern
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * no concern
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Short but sweet. Pass pending response to the notes above. Argento Surfer (talk) 21:49, 19 January 2018 (UTC)
 * Done. Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  22:16, 19 January 2018 (UTC)
 * Nice work - easy pass. Argento Surfer (talk) 13:57, 22 January 2018 (UTC)
 * Did a cheeky little ce, auto ed, checked for dupe wikilinks and changed date to year in the biblio; all edits suggestive, rv as desired. Regards Keith-264 (talk) 13:01, 8 March 2018 (UTC)