Talk:Text annotation/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Grandiose (talk · contribs) 10:48, 15 June 2012 (UTC) I'll be taking this review.

Opening comments
Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 10:48, 15 June 2012 (UTC)
 * Tone of "Social reading" is unencyclopedic; needs referencing; direct link should be avoided.
 * In terms of layout, "Educational applications" is a-paragraph-a-source which isn't helpful to the reader understanding the points being made. Ideally the passages should be woven so as to have each paragraph making a separate point. There's also an external link which should be avoided and actually it ought to be the general system we're interested in, not that particular one.
 * I think there's a surprising amount missing from the history. The image of the Talmud is a great example, but the history section is short. There is no mention of glosses, for example and those subjects dealt with are very brief. This ought to be expanded.
 * The passage including: (1)"facilitat[ing] reading and later writing tasks," which includes annotations that support reading for both personal and professional purposes; (2)"eavesdrop[ping] on the insights of other readers," which involves sharing of annotations; (3)"provid[ing] feedback to writers or promote communication with collaborators," is very difficult to follow. Consider presenting it in another format.
 * There's a lot of work to be done here; I'lve put the article on hold for seven days. If at that stage these task aren't complete, I'll fail it: this is essentially an indefinite hold. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 12:27, 18 June 2012 (UTC)
 * OK, I'm failing the article but if the nominator returns I'll open up a new review as soon as I'm notified of his or her return. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 15:03, 28 June 2012 (UTC)