Talk:Thanksgiving (Family Guy)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ebe123 (talk · contribs) 11:56, 1 December 2011 (UTC)

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 * "The episode follows the Griffin family, and several of their neighbors, as they celebrate the Thanksgiving holiday. As they sit down for dinner, they are shocked to see that their neighbors Joe and Bonnie Swanson's son has suddenly returned, after having originally thought that he had died in the Iraq War." so after the first sentence, it is not flowing as well as other sentences.
 * Done. Gage (talk) 08:29, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
 * It isn't fixed. I think that it should be in a different paragraph.   Ebe 123  → report on my contribs. 10:39, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
 * Can you give an example of what you'd like to see done? Gage (talk) 03:15, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
 * "The episode follows the Griffin family, and several of their neighbors, as they celebrate the Thanksgiving holiday.


 * As they sit down for dinner, they are shocked to see that Kevin Swanson, son of Joe and Bonnie Swanson, has returned from Iraq."
 * You want the lead to be split into two paragraphs? I strongly oppose that suggestion, as it has never been a requirement of any of the other GAs that have done, or even the FAC I got promoted. Please do not fail the article based on this one point. Everything else is fine, in my opinion. Gage (talk) 14:33, 3 December 2011 (UTC)
 * Well, it was just a suggestion so I would of not failed this based on 1 point.

Reception

 * I feel like Kevin McFarland's review is getting too much weight on it, while that the positive review is considerably smaller.
 * Done. Gage (talk) 08:29, 2 December 2011 (UTC)

Comments
Found nothing else, putting on hold (7 days). Ebe 123 → report on my contribs. 20:49, 1 December 2011 (UTC)


 * Pass. Good job for the article.   Ebe 123  → report on my contribs. 16:00, 3 December 2011 (UTC)