Talk:That's the Woman I Want/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 14:51, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

Going to review this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 14:51, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Pilot

 * "Lindolfo Chaves is the president of a tobacco company based in Havana," - more concise president of a Havana-based tobacco company
 * "his doctor diagnoses him with a heart murmur" - what type of heart murmur?
 * "his uncle's arrival comes at a bad time for Ruperto: " - try not to use word such as "at a bad time"
 * "with the help of Sócrates, Ruperto's butler," - how about with the help of Ruperto's butler Sócrates instead?
 * "the three characters play out the farce in front of Uncle Lindolfo. Lindolfo believes the ruse" - Try not to have the last word of a sentence start the next one like this

Production

 * "by company Bolívar Films," - perhaps clarify what type of company Bolívar Films was
 * "as an opportunity to create his own feature in Venezuela." - feature film
 * "and used the same crew as El demonio es un ángel." - from

Marketing and release

 * Please state briefly who María Gabriela Colmenares is
 * "Some of these slogans explicitly promoted the famous Venezuelan composer Eduardo Serrano," - the word "famous" isn't needed IMO
 * "Some of the promotions before release also include newspaper interviews," - promotions of the film before its release
 * "The press release on the day of premiere, Colmenares explains" - In the press release on the day of the premiere, Colmenares explains that it,
 * Also, is the press release from Bolivar Films or another entity? It would help for clarity

Analysis

 * "Colmenares writes (in 1999 and 2005) that" - I don't feel that the parentheses are needed as it looks like a sidenote instead
 * "Azuaga García also notes that That's the Woman I Want is, along with The Yacht Isabel Arrived This Afternoon, "the most representative," - The Yacht Isabel Arrived This Afternoon are "the most representative,"
 * "In 2009, Colmenares looked at the credits of the film," - more formal; observed