Talk:The '59 Sound (song)/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 11:30, 20 April 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: PSA (talk · contribs) 02:07, 24 April 2024 (UTC)

Taking. It is nice to be working with you in GAN for the first time. Please give me a moment within the day to finish the review ‍ PSA 🏕️  (talk) 02:07, 24 April 2024 (UTC)


 * Of course👍 Alon Alush (talk) 05:27, 24 April 2024 (UTC)

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Review
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Spotchecks
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2 - I don't see this verified?

4 - no issues

7 - doesn't say that the amp is where the song gets its title. The Rolling Stone source does, though. Recommend removing the other citations.

5/11/19 - doesn't say that the amp is where the song gets its title. No mention of the car accident. Quotations verified.

8/14 - no issues

21 - no issues I guess? The page uses a different title but that's on them. Readers will benefit from getting a full date for the radio release.

23/33 - this is not the Spin source?

25 - no issues

30 - no issues

32 - no issues

34 - no issues

36 - no issues. If you were to remove the other citations for the statement you used for this, I recommend keeping this source.

40 - no issues

43 - no issues. If you were to remove the other citations for the statement you used for this, I recommend keeping this source.

47 - no issues found

Prose comments
Comments will be based on concision.


 * "for the band's 2008 album, also titled The '59 Sound" -> "for the band's album The '59 Sound (2008)" ✅
 * The background gives the impression that the song was self-written (only by one person) but the entire band wrote it; this should be clarified.
 * It is definitely possible to paraphrase the quotations in the background section.
 * "The song's themes are mixed with punk rock and classic rock" doesn't really make sense considering this is under a "Lyrics" section, plus this takes somewhat of a journalistic tone. Split the part about the themes away from the part about the genres. Try to add additional information about the music and change the header accordingly.
 * No need for the "lyrically" ✅
 * You already namedropped Fallon earlier so no need to repeat his first name ✅
 * "Brian Fallon said the song is about growing older; and 'carrying on'" make the tense consistent. remove the first name and the semicolon. You can paraphrase the quotation to "healing from trauma" ✅
 * You can also paraphrase the next quotation; suggest removing the "not a kid anymore" bit and merge "people are going to start leaving" with the previous sentence like: "Fallon said the song was about growing older, healing from trauma, and accepting that loved ones eventually die" ✅
 * Be consistent with italicizing music publications (Why are Billboard, Spin, PopMatters, and Pitchfork not italicized?) ✅
 * "released by record label SideOneDummy" no need for "record label" ✅
 * "was generally well received" -> "was well-received"✅
 * "said the song is 'all about the exhilaration that goes along with raw, driving rock'" not quite what the source conveys. The source meant to praise the song's raw, energetic soundscape ✅
 * Do not give readers a list of random names to say a critic compared the song to the music of certain acts, because 9 times out of 10 they don't know how those acts sound. I recommend foregoing the comparison entirely; this critic also praised the song's raw, energetic soundscape, which is more insightful to readers. Suggest summarizing both critics' thoughts within one sentence.
 * The Rolling Stone listicle also comments on this. Suggest writing: "Other critics praised the song's raw, energetic soundscape," with citations to the three sources I mentioned.
 * "nuanced and assured" how does this help readers understand the song?

@Alon Alush: thank you for your patience. Please take the time to fully digest my comments, and ping me once you are done addressing these <b style="border-radius:3em;padding:4px;background:#D8B51A;color:white;">‍ PSA 🏕️ </b> (talk) 08:05, 28 April 2024 (UTC)


 * @Alon Alush over a week has passed and many of these have yet to be addressed. I am giving you five more days to address everything, or the review will be closed. <b style="border-radius:3em;padding:4px;background:#D8B51A;color:white;">‍ PSA 🏕️ </b> (talk) 01:44, 6 May 2024 (UTC)
 * @Alon Alush apologies, but since five days have passed without any action towards the remaining suggestions, I will have to fail the nomination. Feel free to renominate once you have addressed the pending issues outside GAN. <b style="border-radius:3em;padding:4px;background:#D8B51A;color:white;">‍ PSA 🏕️ </b> (talk) 06:08, 12 May 2024 (UTC)