Talk:The 3rd Birthday/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 21:23, 21 April 2015 (UTC)

I should complete this by tomorrow at the latest ☠ Jag  uar  ☠ 21:23, 21 April 2015 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

Initial comments

 * "It was released in 2010 in Japan and 2011 in North America and Europe" - release dates could be more specific to each region, but this is just a suggestion
 * "creatures known as the Twisted have appeared from beneath Manhattan and decimated the city" - Manhattan isn't a city, would it sound better being replaced with "New York City" or creatures known as the Twisted have appeared from beneath Manhattan and decimated New York City?
 * The lead summarises the article well so this meets the GA criteria
 * "Aya can receive briefings for missions, view additional documents, and buy and customize new weapons" - no need for this extra "and" here
 * "When activated, Aya entered "Liberation Mode", a state enabling her to move around the battlefield" - why is this in past tense?
 * "a company created by former Capcom staff members who had first worked on the high-definition remaster of Rez" - this part has no citation
 * Is there no track list for the Music section?
 * "Reorchestrations of two pieces of classical music" - should have a hyphen

Close - promoted
Honestly I could find nothing wrong with this article that would have made this be put on hold, so I'll promote this straight away. The above points I found were mostly minor prose issues, though I would recommend addressing them if you want to FAC this. Some minor points included a sentence being in past tense and no specific release dates in the lead, but other than that this was a great article. Its comprehensiveness and good prose makes it a Good Article, well done ☠  Jag  uar  ☠ 18:53, 23 April 2015 (UTC)