Talk:The Amazing Spider-Man 2/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 03:35, 31 March 2016 (UTC)

Hello, I am Carbrera, and I'll be reviewing this article for possible good article submission.

Full review coming very soon. Carbrera (talk) 03:35, 31 March 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks for starting the review process. SuperHero ● 👊 ● ★ 06:26, 31 March 2016 (UTC)

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 * Insert a comma after "Alex Kurtzman"
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 * Insert a comma after "Aunt May"
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 * Reword "with the addition of new cast" to "with the addition of a new cast"
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 * Insert a comma after"antagonist"
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 * Reword "with the highest openings" to perhaps "with high openings" or something different.
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 * add "other" in-between "in" and "films" in the line "will feature in films in the Marvel Cinematic Universe".
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 * Insert a comma before and after "Richard Parker".
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 * Insert a comma after "Richard's son".
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 * Changed "attempted" to "attempts" to keep tenses consistent.
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 * Insert a comma after "employee".
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 * Insert a comma before and after "Harry Osborn.
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 * Insert a comma after "terminally-I'll father".
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 * Reword "making him think that Spider-Man had betrayed him before attacking furiously" to "making him think that Spider-Man has betrayed him, where he then attacks furiously."
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 * Insert comma after "German scientist".
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 * Insert a comma after "There".
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 * Change "armour" to "armor" because this article is written in American English.
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 * Reword "professes his love for her" to "professes his love to her".
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 * Reword "and vowing to go" to "and vows to go".
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 * Change the comma after "goes" to a semicolon or start a new sentence with "They agree to go to England together".
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 * Reword "after webbing breaks in the clock tower" to "after the webbing in the clock tower breaks".
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 * Change "after-effects" to just "effects".
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 * Reword "and rampages through the streets" to "and goes on a rampage through the streets".
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 * Reword "He felt that it was a responsibility" to "He felt that it was his responsibility".
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 * Insert a comma after "powerful".
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 * Reword "following an accident and taking the alias of "Electro"" to "following an accident, then taking the alias of "Electro"".
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 * Replace "since" with "for".
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 * Reword "He eventually assumes the role of the Green Goblin after he injected a special serum of the spider-venom who curing him but suddenly it turns him into a hideous psychotic and ugly ruthless goblin-like creature who dons a technological suit who heals him and also he uses a large glider to fly" to "He eventually assumes the role of the Green Goblin after injecting a special serum of spider-venom into his body, initially injected to provide a cure, which instead turns him into a hideous, psychotic, goblin-like creature. As the Green Goblin, Harry dons a technological suit capable of healing him and can fly with the use of a large glider".
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 * Omit "member" following "Head of the Board".
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 * Reword "who is conflicts with Harry, claiming that Harry is just a boy and doesn't have enough power to take lead on Oscorp, so that's why he hates him and wants to reject him from the CEO stand" to "He is often in dispute with Harry over his capabilities of being a CEO to Oscorp, claiming that because Harry is a boy, he is incapable of leading the company."
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 * Reword "who allies with Harry and gets from him a huge well-armored robotic rhino-like suit" with "who allies with Harry and receives a massive, well-armored, robotic, rhino-like suit from him".
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 * Replace "from the first film while he appears" with "from the first film, where he appears"
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 * Insert a comma before and after "Stan Lee".
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 * Replace the period after villain for a semi-colon.
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 * Delete he before "explained that the redesign".
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 * Replace "along with" with "as well as".
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 * Replace "at Main Street" with "on Main Street".
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 * Omit "account" after "Twitter".
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 * Omit the "at" after "at the".
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- The prequel has one. It was even promoted as GA. <span style="text-shadow: 4px 4px 15px Yellow, -4px -4px 15px Red;">SuperHero ● <span style="text-shadow: 4px 4px 15px Yellow, -4px -4px 15px Red;">👊 ● ★ 07:49, 5 April 2016 (UTC)
 * I don't see why the 'External video' column is necessary
 * But as for now i had replaced with Times Square image. <span style="text-shadow: 4px 4px 15px Yellow, -4px -4px 15px Red;">SuperHero ● <span style="text-shadow: 4px 4px 15px Yellow, -4px -4px 15px Red;">👊 ● ★ 08:05, 5 April 2016 (UTC)

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 * Insert a comma after "Time Square".
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 * Insert a comma in "1600".
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 * Replace "sees Mystique" with "shows Mystique".
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The rumor that James Horner turned down this movie because the script was terrible is false. He states this in a 2015 interview. He was never offered the film. Tropic Wolf (talk) 03:17, 7 December 2020 (UTC)
 * Insert a comma after "Eurythmics".
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 * Reword "his work for this film to be different" with "his for this film as different".
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 * Reword "from previous works that he did" with "from previous works by him"
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 * Omit "account" after "Twitter".
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 * Insert a comma after "Williams".
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 * Reword "indicating as part of the film's soundtrack" with "indicting the song as a part of the film's soundtrack".
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 * Insert a comma after "At the panel".
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 * Replace "serves" with "served".
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 * Reword "Telemundo, and mun2 and a customized page was created on Fandango" with "Telemundo, and mun2. A customized page was created on Fandango."
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 * Replace "available" with "shown".
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 * Omit "have" before "started".
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 * Add "[but]" into the Simon Reynolds of Digital Spy quote in-between "help" and "feel".
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End of GA Review:
A very good article; most of my suggestions are just regarding grammar/punctuation. Please leave "done" after each suggestion once you have fixed it. I will put this article on hold for a maximum of seven days. Thanks. Carbrera (talk) 15:14, 2 April 2016 (UTC)
 * Fantastic job of editing and making changes! Another user has alerted me a few things before I pass the article; the awards sections is a bit messed up and there are too many single sentences/statements featured in the article. I will allow an additional 7 days for changes to be made. Good luck! Carbrera (talk) 23:31, 8 April 2016 (UTC)
 * mate now which kind of settings you expect? Coz actually i have one more article on review and further, i could not log in due to work, so state the reasons or errors in articles asap. <span style="text-shadow: 4px 4px 15px Yellow, -4px -4px 15px Red;">SuperHero ● <span style="text-shadow: 4px 4px 15px Yellow, -4px -4px 15px Red;">👊 ● ★ 12:56, 9 April 2016 (UTC)
 * And, if it does not meet to GA criteria then clear it right now. Coz here i had worked for an article before and in return to give my best, it stated to be soon-to-be-failed. Despite whatever fixations you said i did respectively. And further if reward doesn't get back in return for the so-called-substantial edits, i wont have any regrets for this. <span style="text-shadow: 4px 4px 15px Yellow, -4px -4px 15px Red;">SuperHero ● <span style="text-shadow: 4px 4px 15px Yellow, -4px -4px 15px Red;">👊 ● ★ 13:33, 9 April 2016 (UTC)
 * I don't exactly know what you're talking about, but you need to take a look at the accolades section. It's a mess. Carbrera (talk) 17:31, 9 April 2016 (UTC)
 * , I have noticed the nominator did not respond to your last comment, so I have decided to clean up the accolades section. Cheers, Burklemore1 (talk) 06:05, 11 April 2016 (UTC)
 * Thank you very much. I was barely understanding what the nominator was talking about above; the article is definitely GA status now; cheers! Carbrera (talk) 01:55, 13 April 2016 (UTC)
 * You're most welcome, I could not understand what the nominator was saying either, but I'm glad I could help out to bring this to GA (minorly). Cheers, Burklemore1 (talk)