Talk:The ArchAndroid/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: — Legolas ( talk 2 me ) 07:16, 14 June 2011 (UTC)

Well, well, aren't you a lucky son of a gun? Long wait huh? — Legolas ( talk 2 me ) 07:16, 14 June 2011 (UTC)

Haha yes it's been a while, thought about removing it for a while. Think I nominated it a bit hastily but a review would be helpful to develop the article and if it does not pass at this stage a renomination would be most likely. Thanks in advance, --FeuDeJoie (talk) 19:50, 15 June 2011 (UTC)


 * Infobox
 * 2008–2010 --> 2008–10 per MOS:DATERANGE
 * If its in the soul genre, you don't need to include neo soul, as the main soul covers it.
 * Add alternate text for the cover image per WP:ALT, to help in readers who are visually impaired.
 * Since this is a concept album and is part of a series, a chronology is needed in this case, irrespective of the first release being an EP.


 * Lead
 * My main concern is that the lead is not according to WP:LEAD, meaning that although it summarizes the article, it nevertheless writes a pretty small synopsis. Seeing the article body length, I would expect it to be at least three paras.
 * released May 18, 2010, on Wondaland Arts --> released May 18, 2010, by Wondaland Arts
 * You need to somehow introduce the fact that the album is a concept album and then say "It consists of the second and third parts to Monáe's Metropolis concept series".
 * There is no mention of the release and promotion parts.
 * number 17 --> number 17, non-breaking space is needed always between a numeral and an alphabet.
 * Total sales of the album in US are courtesy Nielsen SoundScan, so you need to mention that.


 * Background
 * The ArchAndroid is the follow-up to Janelle Monáe's debut EP Metropolis: Suite I (The Chase) (2007) --> The ArchAndroid is the follow-up to Janelle Monáe's debut EP, Metropolis: Suite I (The Chase) (2007), and....
 * she was inspired by the quote --> to do what?
 * discussed her incorporation of the android as a metaphor for a minority and the role of the story's protagonist in an interview for Blues & Soul, stating --> Grammatical error
 * Monáe has said about the recording sessions --> Make it a new para
 * the ArchAndroid I went through a very --> The ArchAndroid, I went through a very
 * Why is the studio name in italics?
 * link Turkey, Prague and Atlanta, not common place names


 * Music
 * You are talking about the musical style and its content, so this section name can easily be named Composition
 * all the things I love - scores for films like --> En-dash instead of a normal dash
 * Monáe has stated that the album's lyrical themes and storyline were heavily influenced by Fritz Lang's Metropolis. --> needs source
 * Can yuo avoid repetition of the phrase "The track" in this whole section?


 * Release
 * In promotion of the album --> For promoting the album,
 * link youtube
 * Monae performed to her network debut --> I don't follow
 * Again, continuous repetition of Monae
 * sp mistake --> wwas
 * In singles, when you say that a video was released, please be more explanatory, what did the video show, reception etc.


 * Reception
 * The whole chart performance section doesnot flow well, and is a week-by-week analysis with no conjencture. Please rephrase the whole section.
 * Credit the total US sales to Nielsen SoundScan.


 * Charts
 * No need to mention Billboard with thje US R&B chart, and have it in its full-name, Top R&B/Hip-Hop Albums.

Needs work. Seven days on hold. — Legolas ( talk 2 me ) 10:23, 25 June 2011 (UTC)
 * A little bit of work's been done, but not much. Should it be failed? Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 04:42, 7 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Actually the nominator has informed me that he's taking an exam and will be back after a week to fully address the comments. Hence I'm waiting to see if he does that. — Legolas ( talk 2 me ) 04:52, 7 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Looks fine by me. I'm happy to pass this as GA. — Legolas ( talk 2 me ) 14:23, 12 July 2011 (UTC)