Talk:The Art of Losing (American Hi-Fi album)/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 12:52, 7 March 2021 (UTC)

I will review this later on for the GAN backlog drive! --K. Peake 12:52, 7 March 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Are you sure there isn't inappropriate spacing before the parameters per Template:Infobox album?
 * This was done by a WP:GOCE user in this edit. I didn't change it back since it didn't break the infobox. Yeepsi (talk) 18:09, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * The recording date is not sourced; it is only stated in the body they started in March and aimed for completion in April
 * Changed to 2002 as I couldn't find an end/final recording month. Yeepsi (talk) 18:09, 7 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Just remove the recording date then, as it is not sourced that recording finished that year (remember, the album came out in 2003). --K. Peake 18:53, 7 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Removed. Yeepsi (talk) 18:58, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Target Pop punk to Pop-punk
 * "their eponymous debut album (2001)," → "their eponymous debut studio album (2001),"
 * "also in Hollywood." → "in Hollywood of the state." because Burbank is not in the same location as Hollywood
 * "The album has been described" → "It has been described"
 * Target pop punk to Pop-punk
 * "power pop and" → "power pop, and"
 * "and drew comparisons" → "while received comparisons"
 * Critical should be mentioned before commercial reception; change to saying "while reaching number 80..." at the end of the sentence
 * "The album's title track was released to radio" → "Its title track was released to radio as the lead single" with the wikilink
 * Mention that it was the US Alternative Airplay chart
 * Wikilink music videos

Background and production

 * "in February 2001[1] and promoted it" → "in February 2001, and promoted the album" plus [1] should be at the end of the sentence instead before [3] since it backs up the release date and the song being the lead single
 * Regarding the recording of the album, the source itself mentions them aiming to complete by April like you have wrote here; however, can you find anywhere the date recording was actually finished so dates can be added?
 * I couldn't find an end/final recording month in any of the sources. Yeepsi (talk) 18:09, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "and from Errin Familia at" → "and it was also provided by Errin Familia at" to avoid confusion
 * Wikilink Portland, Maine
 * "The album cost around $200,000 to make; when the band's label" → "It cost around $200,000 to make; when American Hi-Fi's record label" with the wikilink

Composition

 * Retitle to Music and lyrics
 * "to its final title." → "to the final title." but are you sure this doesn't belong in background or release?
 * Target pop punk to Pop-punk
 * "power pop and rock, and has been compared" → "power pop, and rock, while it was compared"
 * "The opening title-track evokes" → "The opening title track evokes" with the target
 * "being told what to do." → "being told what to do by others." to be specific
 * "of the band's song" → "of American Hi-Fi's song"
 * "trying to retrieve his" → "placing more focus on retrieving his"
 * "recall the works of" → "recalls the works of"
 * "and cribs the work of" → "as well as cribbing the work of"
 * [15][13] should be put in numerical order
 * "recall the music of" → "recalls the music of"
 * Are you sure "channels" is the correct term for this section or should you paraphrase, as I'm not too sure if it's encyclopedic?
 * Target sampled to Sampling (music)

Release

 * Retitle to Release and promotion
 * Wikilink music video
 * "over three days and" → "over a period of three days and"
 * "The video shows the band" → "It shows American Hi-Fi"
 * "some fans approaching" → "some fans previously approaching"
 * Mention that it was released to US radio stations
 * "as the album's lead single" → "as the lead single from The Art of Losing" with the wikilink
 * Target digital downloads to Music download
 * Target CD to Compact disc
 * "and addition to" → "in addition to"
 * "titled "Self Control" that" → "entitled "Self Control" that"
 * "both from the group's debut album" → "both from American Hi-Fi"
 * "bonus tracks while" → "bonus tracks, while" with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * "It was promoted with" → "The former was promoted with"
 * "club tour throughout February," → "club tour throughout February 2009,"
 * Mention that the performance was the following month
 * "In April and May that year, the group" → "In April and May of that year, American Hi-Fi"
 * "east coast tour[24] but the tour" → "east coast tour,[24] but the tour"
 * "due to family issues." → "due to the lead act's family issues."
 * Mention that the music videos were released in October 2009

Reception

 * IGN should not be italicised
 * Ah, I was thrown off by the IGN article having its title in italics. Yeepsi (talk) 18:09, 7 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Italicise Melodic, Rock Hard, Rolling Stone, and Spin
 * "E! Online opened" → "The staff of E! Online opened"
 * "the listener was in" → "the listener enters"
 * "metal-friendly ... that" → "metal-friendly [...] that"
 * Wikilink Bay City Rollers
 * IGN should not be italicised
 * "said lyricism was "not [the band's]" → "said lyricism is "not [American Hi-Fi's]"
 * "Rock Hard said" → "The staff of Rock Hard said"
 * ""evoke[d] little emotions in me. They" → ""evoke[s] little emotions", writing: "They"
 * "be annoying ..." → "be annoying [...]"
 * "wrote the band" → "wrote American Hi-Fi"
 * "though with Jones" → "though the inclusion of Jones"
 * Wikilink alternative rock
 * "and that the group had lost" → "and noted American Hi-Fi as having lost"
 * "personal style," sounding" → "personal style", sounding"
 * "the US Billboard 200.[32] The title track reached number 33 on the" → "the US Billboard 200,[32] while the title track reached number 33 on the US"
 * Invoke the Billboard 200 from the chart table by using a refname in place of [32]
 * ""best-of pop punk album" list." → ""best-of pop punk albums" lists."

Track listing

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION

Personnel

 * Target Lars Fox to Grotus

Charts

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed, but do not feel afraid to reach out if you have any queries! --K. Peake 17:30, 7 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Whoops, sorry, I've done all the changes. Yeepsi (talk) 21:51, 7 March 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, there were a few further issues that had arisen after my comments being made but I copyedited the fixes in! --K. Peake 06:38, 8 March 2021 (UTC)