Talk:The Battery (Manhattan)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 11:01, 4 September 2019 (UTC)

I'll take this one on, will post review as soon as possible. Kosack (talk) 11:01, 4 September 2019 (UTC)

Initial review

Lead

 * "but then subsequently went into decline", then and subsequently are largely saying the same thing. You could probably drop then from this sentence.

Site

 * "In 1625-1626", use endashes for year ranges.
 * "the fort Fort James", double use of Fort is rather repetitive. Can we replace the first one with something, site maybe?
 * Link Hudson River in the second paragraph.
 * "the British Landing at Kip's Bay", I don't think the L needs to be upper case here.
 * "In 1808-1811", endash again.

General

 * There are quite a few instances of refs appearing out of numerical order, "from which the Battery got its present name.[10][11][1]" for example. Refs should be presented in numerical order to aid the reader.

20th century

 * "there was a plan to construct a federal government building from the site", should that be "on the site"?
 * "that U.S. Representative from Missouri, Richard Howard Ichord Jr.", that the U.S....? Also, does representative need the capital letter?

Castle Clinton

 * "and managed by the National Park Service" > is managed by...
 * Statue of Liberty, Ellis Island and SeaGlass Carousel are all linked in the one or two sections before this. Repeating links in close proximity is generally considered an WP:OVERLINK.

The Sphere, Hope Garden, and flagpole

 * "1940-1952", endash again.