Talk:The Bells of Saint John/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:38, 7 March 2014 (UTC)

Comments A few issues following this quick run-through, I'll put the article on hold for a week to allow changes to be made. The Rambling Man (talk) 11:20, 9 March 2014 (UTC)
 * "the episode was the first episode" maybe just lose the second "episode".
 * Done. Mat  ty  .  007
 * Having said that, is "the episode was the first episode of the second half of the series" really important?
 * Correct me if I'm wrong, but I think the series was screened in two separate halves. (WP page on series 7 backs this up.) Thanks, Mat  ty  .  007
 * "Official Poster from the BBC Website." ->"Official poster from the BBC website"
 * Done. Mat  ty  .  007
 * No need to link common geographical terms like London.
 * Fixed. Mat  ty  .  007
 * What is "The Great Intelligence"?
 * Linked. Mat  ty  .  007
 * Quotes, including those in the lead, should be referenced and attributed.
 * Sourced in production. Is that OK? Mat  ty  .  007
 * I'm not sure a link to Nuzzle and Scratch for Eve de Leon Allen is relevant here.
 * Removed link. Mat  ty  .  007
 * "As the girl leaves, it is revealed that the girl" repetitive, perhaps "As the girl leaves, it is revealed that she is..."?
 * Done. Mat  ty  .  007
 * tell him that "The bells of Saint John" -> why is The capitalised here?
 * I think it was because it is the episode name, but here I think capitalisation is wrong. Mat  ty  .  007
 * "find the TARDIS exterior" repetitive, -> "find its exterior..."
 * Done. Mat  ty  .  007
 * "initially doesn't recognize" avoid contractions (does not) and use BritEng (recognise).
 * Done. Mat  ty  .  007
 * "internet" or "Internet"? Be consistent.
 * WP page uses caps, so changed to that. Mat  ty  .  007
 * " which leads to The Doctor going to change out of his" -> "this leads The Doctor to change into..."
 * Changed. Mat  ty  .  007
 * Is it "the Doctor" or "The Doctor"? Be consistent.
 * I think it is the Doctor. Changed Thanks, Mat  ty  .  007
 * " and they go to a café to try and work out what's happening" not elegant prose at all. And avoid contractions.  And no need for that accent, cafe is perfectly acceptable.
 * Changed. Mat  ty  .  007
 * "the Great Intelligence" or "The Great Intelligence"?
 * 'the Great Intelligence'. Changeed. Mat  ty  .  007
 * "The show was the official beginning for Clara Oswald" do you mean this episode?
 * Changed. Mat  ty  .  007
 * "Wi-Fi!'".[7]" no need for that full stop.
 * Changed. Mat  ty  .  007
 * Suggest you appropriately link companion somewhere in the prose.
 * Oswald is linked in 'Prequel'. Mat  ty  .  007
 * I mean Companion (Doctor Who). The Rambling Man (talk) 12:30, 9 March 2014 (UTC)
 * Done. Thanks, Mat  ty  .  007
 * "Filming began on 8 October;[3] some filming took place in London, at the Westminster Bridge and alongside the River Thames,[16] with motorbike scenes at the London locations filmed around 16 October 2012.[17][18] The rooftop scenes were filmed ..." film appears four times in two sentences, revise for better prose.
 * Changed. Mat  ty  .  007
 * Is it "the Shard" or "The Shard"?
 * 'the Shard'. Fixed. Mat  ty  .  007
 * Normally hyphenate "four-and-a-half"
 * Done. Mat  ty  .  007
 * "Aladair" -> "Alasdair" perhaps?
 * Done. Mat  ty  .  007
 * "Summer Falls - a book " en dash instead of a hyphen.
 * Changed. Mat  ty  .  007
 * Check reference titles for mis-use of hyphens, e.g. ref 20.
 * What should it be? Thanks, Mat  ty  .  007
 * Avoid SHOUTING in the refs.
 * Fixed. Mat  ty  .  007
 * I have fixed all except the dashes in refs, I don't know what to change it to. Thanks, Mat  ty  .  007  12:25, 9 March 2014 (UTC)