Talk:The Box Tree/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Crisco 1492 (talk · contribs) 14:32, 23 July 2012 (UTC)


 * I'll give this a go. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:32, 23 July 2012 (UTC)

1

 * "and was also served with a duck terrine and pistachios." - Still?
 * Well it's from a review from last month. I've changed it to "and foie gras has also since been served with a duck terrine and pistachios" so that it doesn't get dated. Miyagawa   (talk)  15:39, 23 July 2012 (UTC)


 * "but could not bring himself to make certain dishes such as chicken chasseur or melon boats." - Could not bring himself is awkward. A better construction?
 * Changed to "but decided not to make certain..." Miyagawa   (talk)  15:39, 23 July 2012 (UTC)


 * " half a grilled grapefruit and crêpes." - Perhaps "crêpes and half a grilled grapefruit."
 * Changed as suggested. Miyagawa   (talk)  15:39, 23 July 2012 (UTC)


 * "It was originally owned by Reid and Long who initially operated the premises as a tea room." - Doubt that it was originally owned by Reid and Long if it was built in the 1720s. Clarify.
 * Quite right, that is downright confusing! I've changed it to: "It was purchased by Reid and Long in 1962 who initially operated the premises as a tea room." Miyagawa   (talk)  15:39, 23 July 2012 (UTC)


 * "White returned to the restaurant as a consultant during a spell in 1994, something which lasted two months ended in a court case as Avis successfully brought proceedings against the chef with damages of £880 awarded after he damaged a ceiling during his time there." - Too long, should be trimmed/split.
 * Changed to "White returned to the restaurant as a consultant in 1994, which lasted two months and ended in a court case against the chef with damages of £880 awarded after he damaged a ceiling." Miyagawa   (talk)  15:39, 23 July 2012 (UTC)


 * "The restaurant lost the Michelin star in the 2003 edition of the guide was no longer included in either the AA Restaurant Guide and the Good Food Guide." - Missing a word
 * Inserted "and" at the appropriate point. Miyagawa   (talk)  15:39, 23 July 2012 (UTC)


 * "After the Guellers leased the restaurant from Avis in 2004, it regained a Michelin star within five months of re-opening." - Reads awkwardly. Any better phrasings?
 * Changed to "The Guellers leased the restaurant from Avis in 2004. Within five months of re-opening it regained a Michelin star." Miyagawa   (talk)  15:39, 23 July 2012 (UTC)

3

 * "The change of chef also changed the style of food served" - To?
 * Ended up having to insert a quote as there wasn't really a way I could reword "Mediterranean slant". :) Miyagawa   (talk)  15:51, 23 July 2012 (UTC)


 * The lede does not contain any information from #Description or #Reception.
 * I've reworked the lead to insert elements from those sections, and to make it flow a little better. Miyagawa   (talk)  15:51, 23 July 2012 (UTC)

Others

 * I've given a copyedit; you should review that.
 * Image copyrights (both File:The Box Tree Restaurant - Church Street - geograph.org.uk - 475508.jpg and File:West Yorkshire UK location map.svg) look fine.


 * Spotchecks (based on this revision:
 * FN2
 * a: Supports "opening under Malcolm Reid and Colin Long in 1962"; no close paraphrasing
 * b: Verified, no close paraphrasing
 * c: Verified, no close paraphrasing
 * d: Verified, no close paraphrasing
 * e: Fails verification: Source suggests Bassey visited, but does not support that she was a regular. No close paraphrasing
 * f: Verified, no close paraphrasing


 * FN7
 * a: Verified, no close paraphrasing
 * b: Verified, no close paraphrasing
 * c: Verified, no close paraphrasing
 * d: Verified, no close paraphrasing
 * e: Verified, no close paraphrasing


 * FN17
 * a: Verified "He would later recall in his book White Heat that the restaurant made him obsessed with food", no close paraphrasing
 * b: Fails verification: Doesn't imply "dated" to me, but that the meat may be going rotten, no close paraphrasing
 * c: Verified, no close paraphrasing


 * FN26
 * a: Verified, no close paraphrasing
 * b: Verified "in 2012 helped to celebrate the restaurant's fiftieth anniversary"; no close paraphrasing
 * Edited both issues, should be fine now. Miyagawa   (talk)  16:14, 23 July 2012 (UTC)

Further discussion

 * On hold for one week to deal with the issues. Please double check your references. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 15:19, 23 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review, I think I've covered everything. If there are any other points, please let me know. I had hoped for photographs of the dishes, but unfortunately Flickr let me down for once (having come through on a couple of other recent restaurant articles). Miyagawa   (talk)  16:16, 23 July 2012 (UTC)
 * That's it, I'm passing this as a GA. Perhaps to celebrate you would like to review another GA: there is quite a backlog, after all. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:25, 23 July 2012 (UTC)