Talk:The Family Jewels (Marina and the Diamonds album)/GA1

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 12:31, 6 July 2016 (UTC)

Hi there! I'm Cartoon network freak and my review for your GAN is going to arrive within this week. Overall, after my first reading of the article, it looks good! Best and until then, Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:31, 6 July 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 * studio album by → studio album recorded by
 * collaborated with producers → collaborated with several producers
 * certified gold → certified Gold
 * and has sold → and has since sold
 * Not sure about the last one, it could be interpreted as meaning that it sold that many copies after being certified Gold &#39;&#39;&#39;tAD&#39;&#39;&#39; (talk) 09:33, 8 July 2016 (UTC)
 * Then leave it this way; it's OK also. Cartoon network freak (talk) 19:32, 8 July 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

 * The cover needs an alt text

Background

 * institutions, and → institutions and
 * began to compose → began composing
 * playing a variety → playing at a variety
 * place in the → place on the
 * of three → of the three
 * said that the title → which title? Do you mean her name?

Composition

 * because I'm → because [she is]
 * track "Are You Satisfied?" ponders → add comma before and after the song's name
 * of the Danish → of Danish
 * "Girls" that → "
 * Girls", which
 * "Girls they never befriend me/'Cause I fall asleep when they speak/Of all the calories they eat" → Add ' instead of " + you need to finish the quote
 * celebrity → plural
 * and some reviews did not include it. → causing some record reviews not including it.

I've reworked this section slightly. I meant "celebrity" as a conceptual noun, like "fame", but I've changed it to "celebrity culture" so that there will be no more misunderstanding. &#39;&#39;&#39;tAD&#39;&#39;&#39; (talk) 19:50, 8 July 2016 (UTC)

Music videos

 * "I Am Not a Robot", featuring much body glitter. → "I Am Not a Robot", which made use of several body glitter.
 * Slightly reworked, "several" is only used for things which can be counted, however &#39;&#39;&#39;tAD&#39;&#39;&#39; (talk) 17:10, 9 July 2016 (UTC)
 * Try to use other words for "video", not the same
 * Her father's opinion is pretty unrelevant in this context
 * Facebook is unreliable; I'm sure you can find another source for it:)

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Singles

 * first single → first single from The Family Jewels
 * and "Mowgli's Road" was released on 13 November 2009 → with "Mowgli's Road" being premiered on 13 November 2009.
 * 1 February 2010,[1] and reached → Make two sentences out of it
 * The 26 April is two times there +
 * Try to use another word for "reached"
 * single, losing → single, eventually losing

Tour

 * stating "Next → stating that "next

Critical reception

 * and Luke → while Luke
 * only in the titles → remove "the titles"
 * Diagree - " ‘Shampain’ – which shares the prize for the album’s worst song name along with ‘Hermit The Frog’ – transcends its duff title and looks straight to Abba, " - they are faulting what the song is called, more than its music &#39;&#39;&#39;tAD&#39;&#39;&#39; (talk) 17:16, 9 July 2016 (UTC)
 * Gill considered → Gill who considered
 * You use two times "considered"
 * and lyrically found → while lyrically founding
 * match what → match with what
 * In the review box, the "fairly" is written two times capital and one time not

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Commercial performance

 * certified Gold → certified Gold
 * and had sold → having sold
 * certified Gold → as above
 * The record reached → It reached
 * Charts, and entered → remove comma
 * It peaked → The record peaked
 * 138;[59] furthermore → form two sentences here

Track listing

 * You should hide the EPs as well like the other editions

Charts

 * Fine

Certifications

 * Remove "Certified units" and "(with citation)"
 * This is how the template appears, see Template:Certification Table Bottom &#39;&#39;&#39;tAD&#39;&#39;&#39; (talk) 17:20, 9 July 2016 (UTC)

Release history

 * Unlink formats and labels

Outcome: On-hold for 7 days. Besides some words repetitions and few grammar issues, this article is well-written, and you could consider nominating it for FA-status like Electra Heart. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 16:55, 9 July 2016 (UTC)

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