Talk:The Father, the Son, and J.C.

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Ther plot section is too long, but regardless of that the tone of writing is not appropriate to an encyclopaedia. I could highlight some specific phrases (Hank is floored; Hank is choked up; starts to rip apart the place; After all was straight) that grate on the intellect, but in fact the whole style, though well-suited to a fanzine, does not come across as well-written and encyclopaedic. Emeraude (talk) 11:55, 10 February 2011 (UTC)