Talk:The Field Where I Died/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 17:14, 2 November 2012 (UTC)

Glad to see you working on The X-Files again. Well done! TBrandley 18:24, 2 November 2012 (UTC)

Comments


 * "aired" clarify that it is its original airing
 * Only have Monster-of-the-Week linked itself, without the outside "" quote marks
 * Only Fox should be linked, without network
 * "The episode", then the next sentence uses "This episode". Change "This episode" to "It"
 * "clearly details" clearly doesn't represent a neutral point of view. Remove, unless a reliable source can be found stating so.
 * "of their series" can explain what type of show that is, assuming that the person reading this article doesn't click on that link?
 * ""The Field Where I Died" received mixed to positive reviews from television critics. Many praised the episode's exploration of loss and grief as well as Cloke's acting." Merge all that into one, perhaps?
 * Per WP:TVPLOT, maybe some none important details can be cut down, it should be "200 to 500 words", but I'm not sure what it is there in plot section
 * "anonymous caller" that whole sentence confuses me, his name is "Sydney", so how can he be "anonymous"?
 * "Assistant Director" Director shouldn't be in capitals, as per MOS:CAPS
 * "Mulder and Scully question Ephesian", the next sentence also uses "question", can something different be found, as it being used so close isn't idealiy
 * Link President of the United States per WP:UNDERLINK
 * "says" could be changed to "claimed" or something, sometimes
 * "the Smoking Man" to "The Smoking Man", with capitals, for MOS:CAPS, as that is his "character" name
 * "appears" is that neutral, or is that opinion, from this sentence "it appears that Melissa is his soulmate who is always separated from him"
 * "created" to "developed"
 * "Eighteen" should be "18" per WP:MOSNUM
 * "only to find" remove only per WP:NPOV
 * "premiered" to "originally aired"
 * "extremely negative" remove extremely per WP:NPOV
 * Wasn't the consensus for The X-Files Wiki link to say "The X-Files Wiki" instead of just "The X-Files"?
 * Categories should be sorted in alphabetical order

Overall; good job. Once the above concerns are addressed, I'll pass the article based on the good article criteria. Cheers, TBrandley 18:24, 2 November 2012 (UTC)
 * OK, I believe I've fixed all the issues you brought up. Thanks for reviewing this.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   19:33, 2 November 2012 (UTC)
 * No problem, I'll pass the article now. TBrandley 20:02, 2 November 2012 (UTC)