Talk:The Fox (What Does the Fox Say?)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: SNUGGUMS (talk · contribs) 15:32, 16 May 2015 (UTC)

I'll take this. Expect comments within a few days. Ping me or post on my talk page if the review is not up by then. Snuggums (talk / edits) 15:32, 16 May 2015 (UTC)

Sorry for the delay; I got sidetracked and am drafting the review. It should be up before May ends. Snuggums (talk / edits) 20:39, 28 May 2015 (UTC)


 * Infobox
 * For genres, EDM is not mentioned in given reference (FN2)


 * Lead
 * Since the view count on YouTube is subject to change, it's best to use a source other than YouTube and attribute its view count and date range to that
 * I don't think the amount of time spent at #6 in the US is needed
 * I kveld med YLVIS isn't mentioned in attributed source
 * "'The Fox', 'created to fail', has ironically and accidentally gone viral" → "While the song was "created to fail", it went viral"


 * Production
 * "In an interview with Norwegian newspaper Aftenposten, the brothers stated" → "The brothers told Aftenposten"
 * No need to have "In an interview" for "In an interview on the Norwegian-Swedish talk show Skavlan"
 * "Bård described the writing process for "The Fox" in an interview with Billboard in the United States" → "Bård told Billboard that"
 * "Bård, being interviewed by Entertainment Weekly, talked about their intention of making 'The Fox'" simply doesn't read well
 * "M4SONIC described producing 'The Fox':"..... awkward phrasing
 * Try to paraphrase the last two quotes; they're rather lengthy


 * Music video and composition
 * This should have its own section and not be a subsection of "Production"
 * "typical" in "typical electronic dance pop" is unneeded and vague
 * "increasingly absurd" sounds biased
 * I'd merge the third and fourth paragraph per MOS:PARAGRAPHS, which discourages really short paragraphs


 * Reception and responses
 * I'd simply title this "reception"
 * Not sure that top quote from Bård is needed
 * "Catchiness" isn't really a neutral description


 * Live performances
 * This should be its own section
 * It might help to include commentary on performances
 * "The song was later performed live during concerts given in 2014-2015 in Norway and Sweden as a part of duo's The Expensive Jacket Tour" needs to be sourced, and "2014-2015" should be "2014–2015" per WP:DASH


 * Children's book
 * Like "live performances", this should also be its own section


 * Analysis
 * Five reviews doesn't seem like very much for a very well-known song that went viral online


 * Popular culture
 * This should be its own section
 * I'd retitle this to "In popular culture"
 * "This song appears in Just Dance 2015" is missing a citation, and I'd replace "this" with "the".


 * References
 * Dead links need fixing
 * When available, each reference needs authors, names of works, page titles, and accessdates
 * YouTube is discouraged as a source for potential copyright concerns. Additionally, the "Y" and "T" are capitalized in its name.
 * Are "Mother Jones", "Gossip Cop", "Screen Junkies", "hkclubbing.com", "4Music", or "MelOn" reliable?
 * I'm not convinced "The Daily Beast", "The Lantern", "In The Mix", "Heavy.com", or "The Rock Father" are good sources
 * "Toronto Sun", "Gigwise", TMZ, "London Evening Standard", Twitter, "The Huffington Post", and "On The Red Carpet" are not reliable
 * "The Telgraph" should read The Daily Telegraph
 * "The" is part of The A.V. Club's title
 * Yahoo! shouldn't be italicized, and remove the "chart watch" bit from work/publisher field


 * Overall


 * Well-written?
 * Prose quality: Needs copyediting
 * Manual of Style compliance: Not exactly


 * Verifiable?
 * Reference layout: Could be better
 * Reliable sources: Poor/questionable sources need replacing
 * No original research: Dead links make things harder to verify, and not everything is properly attributed


 * Broad in coverage?
 * Major aspects: More reviews would benefit the article
 * Focused: No excess detail


 * Neutral?: Not exactly


 * Stable?: Looks good


 * Illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * Appropriate licensing: No copyright infringements
 * Relevance and captioning: I'm not sure if File:The Fox (What Does the Fox Say?).ogg or File:Ylvis The Fox.jpg provide any benefit


 * Pass or Fail?: Since there are too many problems right now (mainly with references), I'm failing this without putting it on hold. Hopefully this will help improve the article. Snuggums (talk / <b style="color:#454545">edits</b>) 20:42, 31 May 2015 (UTC)