Talk:The Front (The Simpsons)/GA1

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*Correctly guessing that Meyers didn't take them seriously because they were kids -> "did not"; "they were children" *Do we really need the "(click for greater detail)" in the image caption? It's kind of a given, IMO. I think that's about it. Most of the issues are somewhat extremely nitpicky and pedantic, so they shouldn't be too hard to fix. I'm putting the article on hold for 7 days, and hopefully then it'll be able to pass for GA :) Good luck! — 97198   talk  12:58, 1 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Krusty the Clown and Brooke Shields presented the award for Outstanding Writer -> present tense
 * Use mdashes not ndashes for introduce the award – the first time he has ever seen the show – Grampa is appalled &  a brief segment – complete with its own theme song – entitled...
 * "that delightful Billy Crystal." -> period after quotation marks, as the quote isn't a complete sentence
 * Adam Lapidus or Adam I. Lapidus? Pick one and go for it.
 * Re-submit or resubmit? As above, for consistency's sake.
 * Lapidus wrote a spec script, and called Dave Davis to see what he thought of it -> no comma necessary
 * In the scene at the Itchy & Scratchy writers lounge (pictured) -> "Itchy & Scratchy" in italics
 * Lisa is reading a book titled "How to get rich writing cartoons" -> capitalise book title
 * a member of the Simpsons staff -> "The Simpsons"
 * "Animation Wing" at Itchy & Scratchy studios -> show title in italics
 * In the scene, Itchy and Scratchy are using a typewriter, Scratchy pulls the paper out and throws it into the air, forming an Itchy & Scratchy Productions logo -> Doesn't make sense. Maybe needs an "and" somewhere in the middle?
 * "did you see this episode?" -> "Did"
 * The "Clip not done yet" screen for the Ren & Stimpy cartoon was a counter-attack -> What screen? Maybe explain because there doesn't seem to be enough info about the context to understand.
 * The Simpsons, by stating: "The show succeeded despite the writing" -> no colon necessary
 * Bit of a shame there's only one review in the Reception. It's kinda stupid asking, but you're absolutely, positively sure there is no other single piece of info out there that we can use? I noticed some of the other season 4 articles have Nielsen ratings - do you have access to any of those figures?
 * Wikilinks should only be included when they're relevant to the context; remove links to 1974, church, mother-in-law, internet forum, pseudonym, font, machine gun & dynamite.
 * "The Front" is the 19th episode of The Simpsons ' fourth season -> "The Simpsons'"; "nineteenth"


 * Looks pretty nice after some fix-ups. Only a couple more things to point out:


 * Bart and Lisa decide to write an Itchy & Scratchy - shouldn't they be writing an episode, rather? (Can't believe I didn't catch that before.)
 * "Class of 1974" High School reunion - don't think high school should be capitalised
 * A scene from the writer's lounge at the Itchy & Scratchy studios - show title should be in italics
 * Lapidus wrote a spec script and called Dave Davis to see what he thought of it. Davis liked the idea, and called James L. Brooks - "called" is used twice in succession. Maybe just say "pased it on to" for one of them.
 * Another such joke is the door to the "Animation Wing" at Itchy & Scratchy studios - show title in italics
 * studios, which is a parody of the Disney animation building, which has an identical door - should be reword so as to avoid "which ... which ..."
 * Combine same references using ref names, eg. 2 & 11, 5 & 13. (Ref #5 also has a stray semicolon after names.)
 * External links lists TV.com page under wrong title

Good stuff, otherwise - we're almost there! — 97198   talk  14:15, 2 June 2008 (UTC)