Talk:The Glass Passenger/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Disc Wheel (talk · contribs) 13:32, 14 April 2020 (UTC)

Will get to this in the coming days. Disc Wheel ( T  +  C ) 13:32, 14 April 2020 (UTC)

Background Production Composition "2:00 am" - Could be wrong, but capitalize the am
 * "By July 2006, he had worked through the writer's block and was writing alone in a studio. " - I'd cite this sentence
 * "New batches of songs" --> try to rephrase this, batches just comes off more slangy
 * "He learned a friend, who previously printed his merchandise, meant to go on a surfing trip to Costa Rica." This sentence was confusing to me, if I understood it correctly, maybe change it to : He learned of a friend's plans to go on a surfing trip in Costa Rica and drove to New York, before the two flew to Costa Rica."
 * "The pop rock track[22] " move the [22] to the semi colon

Release
 * "on April 22[34] but was eventually pushed back." push [34] back to the end
 * "It was filmed the following month[55] with director Steven Murashige.[56] " Put 55 with 56
 * "McMahon had spent the preceding year discussing a reissue of the release with his former label, which had no interest in doing it.[63]" change to --> : "label, who did not reciprocate interest."

Touring
 * "Dubbed the Father from the Earth tour," --> no idea how these things work, but does the Tour get Quotations or Italicized or anything special?
 * Can't remember where I read this (or was told), but it doesn't need any quote marks/italics/etc. Yeepsi (talk) 15:18, 19 April 2020 (UTC)

Reception
 * Several instances of putting the punctuation inside the " marks. In the previous sections of the article you had been putting the punctuation outside the " marks, I would change this section to match that above. There are several instances of this in this section

Track Listing

Good

Personnel

Good

Charts

Good

References
 * Made the same change as I did in Everything in Transit for subsections

Again good work, great album. Ping me when you're done. Plans to do People and Things for GA? Ping me when finished. Disc Wheel ( T  +  C ) 14:57, 19 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Done! I definitely plan to bring P&T to GA (likewise with McMahon's Wilderness solo albums) at some point. Yeepsi (talk) 15:18, 19 April 2020 (UTC)