Talk:The Gruffalo/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) 15:44, 23 September 2022 (UTC)

I'll have a go at this. Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:44, 23 September 2022 (UTC)


 * Thank you for picking it up!  Unexpected lydian♯4 talk‽  09:05, 24 September 2022 (UTC)

Comments
This is a carefully-written and well-cited article and I have only the most minor of comments.


 * The audio file needs to be updated, but that's not a GA matter.
 * Yep I noticed that. Definitely not my area of expertise! I may drop a note on the relevant WikiProject page.


 * "also" is used 15 times in the article. Not sure any of them are necessary.
 * Thanks - reduced to 4 now!


 * "who do not know how or are learning how to read." - the first "how" is not needed.
 * Removed.


 * "In order to cerate" -> "create".
 * Fixed.


 * "The name of the Gruffalo itself is, Burke writes," - this follows a chunk on exactly the topic of the choice of name, so this comes across a little oddly. I suggest we have instead "In Burke's view, the name is".
 * Thank you, that works better.


 * "not introduced into general circulation and sold" -> "not introduced into general circulation, but were sold".
 * Fixed.


 * I'd advise you to archive the rather ephemeral-looking weblinks such as to Forestry England and Whinlatter Forest as these are likely to be chopped (to coin a phrase) when the next thing comes along.
 * Good plan, I've added an archive link. If I get a moment I might go through the rest of the links and archive them as well.


 * The Whinlatter Forest ref needs a publisher.
 * Have added the website name.


 * The Ardkinglas ref needs a date.
 * Done.


 * The refs to WorldCat should be replaced with { {cite book}} and refs directly to the products concerned. You can use the parameter "id=" for the CD's catalogue number.
 * Thanks, have changed them.


 * The prizes and awards don't fit well in "Background and publication history". Suggest you have a section "Awards" or similar.
 * I've changed the "Legacy and merchandise" section to "Legacy", and added an "Awards" subheading, since I thought it fit best in there.


 * "Background and publication history" isn't a coherent section, as the "and" reveals. Suggest we have a section on the author (a very brief potted biography) and a section on the book's creation; and it would make more sense to have these up at the top, as they come before the book itself. You might structure these sections like this, for example:


 * 1. Context
 * 1.1 Author
 * 1.2 Creating the book
 * (existing Plot, Themes, etc)
 * Publication history

All that will leave "Publication history" where it is now.
 * I have re-jigged the sections around as you've suggested and added a little extra background on Scheffler and Donaldson.


 * I suggest you add a sentence on translations; that can go in the publication history, unless you get enough material for a separate section. I wouldn't list all the languages; it's enough to say "33 languages including Korean and Swahili" or whatever. This is one case where citing WorldCat is probably the right thing to do, unless you can find a better source (a recent newspaper article would be ideal).
 * The Guardian reported in 2020 that it's in over 50 languages, so have used that reference. I've find some articles about more interesting ones: Cornish, Scots and Latin.

Summary
This is an excellent article and will make a worthy GA. Chiswick Chap (talk) 16:03, 23 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Thank you! It was a fun one to write. I've responded to all your comments so let me know what you think!  Unexpected lydian♯4 talk‽  14:14, 24 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Super, it's a GA. Chiswick Chap (talk) 14:21, 24 September 2022 (UTC)