Talk:The Hall of Egress/GA1

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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 19:03, 23 April 2018 (UTC)


 * "The episode was written and storyboarded by Tom Herpich, from head writer Kent Osborne, Jack Pendarvis, Ashly Burch, and Herpich." from what? It feels like a word is missing here.
 * You're right. I was missing "a story by".-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  19:40, 23 April 2018 (UTC)


 * "Finn and Jake set out to found a dungeon" Found?  As in to start a dungeon?
 * That was a typo; I fixed it and rewrote the following sentence to make it all flow better.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  19:40, 23 April 2018 (UTC)


 * Ref 8 appears not to be an RS. Got another source for this "business practice"?  (NB:In reality PT Barnum never did half the stuff he's alleged to have done, making me wonder if this too is apocryphal.
 * Good point. I've replaced it with a dictionary entry hosted by the Cornell Law School. Would that be OK?-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  19:40, 23 April 2018 (UTC)
 * Much better. Courcelles (talk) 19:42, 23 April 2018 (UTC)


 * What won the Emmy that year?
 * How does that look?-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  19:43, 23 April 2018 (UTC)


 * "The episode, which debuted on March 5, 2016 on Cartoon Network." is a sentence fragment. Courcelles (talk) 19:43, 23 April 2018 (UTC)
 * I have corrected this.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  19:44, 23 April 2018 (UTC)

That's all I've got. Courcelles (talk) 19:09, 23 April 2018 (UTC)
 * How does these changes look?-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  19:44, 23 April 2018 (UTC)


 * Looks good. Promoting. Courcelles (talk) 19:48, 23 April 2018 (UTC)