Talk:The Invisible Man (1933 film)/GA1

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 11:45, 5 April 2021 (UTC)

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week.  Some Dude From North Carolina  (talk) 11:45, 5 April 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * "Style B" image looks good while the unused "Style A" is going to give me nightmares.
 * Normally I'd stick with a style A myself, but I think there's a good reason why style B i the more used. I'm leaning more towards it as it better represents the film. That's just my hunch though! Andrzejbanas (talk) 18:39, 6 April 2021 (UTC)


 * No current issues with the infobox, billing block matches, and parameters are sourced.
 * Is there no info for "gross" in the infobox? I know Box Office Mojo mentions a bit.
 * Per Mank's book in the release or reception seciton, the total gross is unknown. The gross from BoxOfficeMojo appears to be from some minor theatreical re-releases (and this is just me assuming this from their dates) so I don't feel they are really that important. Andrzejbanas (talk) 18:39, 6 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Is there a reason a language parameter is also missing?
 * I didn't have a source for it. I mean, it's in English, but I can just add it. Andrzejbanas (talk) 18:39, 6 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Best to fill parameters so I suggest adding it in.  Some Dude From North Carolina  (talk) 19:46, 7 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:20, 7 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Why is the AFI reference marked as dead? It works for me.
 * I don't see where it's marked as dead in the article. Could you point this out to me? Andrzejbanas (talk) 18:39, 6 April 2021 (UTC)
 * I mean, the link sends me to the archive. This can be fixed by adding the "|url-status=live" parameter.  Some Dude From North Carolina  (talk) 19:46, 7 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:20, 7 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Add a serial comma after the first mention of Gloria Stuart.
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 18:39, 6 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Is there a word missing between "covered in bandages whose eyes".
 * Re-phrased. Andrzejbanas (talk) 18:39, 6 April 2021 (UTC)


 * It should be mentioned with parentheses that Rains portrays the title character.
 * That's not really his name in the film. Characters refer to him as that as they don't know who he is, but in credits he's credited as he is in the citation. I feel like anyone reading this opening paragraph can figure this out from reading the sentence. Andrzejbanas (talk) 18:39, 6 April 2021 (UTC)
 * I meant mentioning Rains portrays him. As in changing "Dr. Jack Griffin" to "Dr. Jack Griffin (Rains)".  Some Dude From North Carolina  (talk) 19:46, 7 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:20, 7 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Add serial commas after Cyril Gardner, Preston Sturges, Jack Sullivan, and Joe Dante.
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 18:39, 6 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Also, now that I notice it, is there a reason British English is being used when talking about an American film? See WP:COFAQ and this archived discussion.
 * This was added before I worked on the article. I wasn't quite sure of the reasoning, but I'd be happy to set it back to American English within the article itself if need be. Andrzejbanas (talk) 18:41, 6 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Yeah, that would probably be for the best; I'll also mention the words that need to be changed.  Some Dude From North Carolina  (talk) 19:46, 7 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Also change the "Use British English" template to "Use American English".  Some Dude From North Carolina  (talk) 00:20, 8 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 19:48, 8 April 2021 (UTC)


 * General words per WP:ENGVAR that need changes:
 * "favourite" "favorite"
 * Changed. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:20, 7 April 2021 (UTC)


 * "fulfil" "fulfill"
 * Changed. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:20, 7 April 2021 (UTC)

Plot and cast

 * Plot summary is under 700 words so that passes WP:FILMPLOT.
 * Is the phrase "Griffin is sleeping, move." correct? The word "move" seems out of place.
 * I didn't write this plot, but it's about spotting the hay move on its own. I think I got it organized. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:20, 7 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Cast list looks good. To the image, add "|upright|" per MOS:UPRIGHT.
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:20, 7 April 2021 (UTC)


 * "Later a farmer enters; and spots movement in the hay where Griffin is sleeping, move." "Later a farmer enters and spots movement in the hay where Griffin is sleeping." or "Later a farmer enters and sees the hay where Griffin is sleeping, move." (remove ";" and repetition of "move")

Production

 * "H.G. Wells" "H. G. Wells" (consistency with lead; also change this in the references).
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:20, 7 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Combine the sources after "from Universal", making the "|pp=" or "|loc=" parameter say "147; 198".
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:20, 7 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Do the same thing with references from the same source (here and in other sections).
 * Done Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:20, 7 April 2021 (UTC)


 * There appears to be a bracket in between the references after "Wells' story". Remove it.
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:20, 7 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Additionally, add year dates to films mentioned in this section and in others.
 * Done, didn't add it to some sections where the date is already mentioned as part of the sentence or earlier in the article though. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:20, 7 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Remove the space between the references after "finished shooting".
 * Done as they have been combined. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:20, 7 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Add a serial comma after "invisible rats".
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:20, 7 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Change "set-up" to "set up".
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:20, 7 April 2021 (UTC)


 * "reading the scene" "reading of the scene"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:20, 7 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Remove the comma after "the role to Rains".
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:20, 7 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Add a serial comma after the first mention of The Black Cat.
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:20, 7 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Principal photography sounds like a better term than "Initial shooting". Maybe swap it.
 * Sure, Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:20, 7 April 2021 (UTC)


 * In the last paragraph, combine "wire frame" into "wireframe".
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:20, 7 April 2021 (UTC)

Release

 * Here and in #Reception, change "..." to "[...]" as it's more visually pleasing.
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:34, 7 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Should be an en-dash between "1932-1933".
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:34, 7 April 2021 (UTC)


 * The phrase "the film to be held" doesn't sound right. Maybe reword.
 * Rephrased. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:34, 7 April 2021 (UTC)


 * "Universal Studios celebrating its 100th anniversary" "Universal Studios celebrated its 100th anniversary and"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:34, 7 April 2021 (UTC)


 * "scratches and stains and improved sound" "scratches, stains, and improved sound"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:34, 7 April 2021 (UTC)


 * "by six-film release" "by a six-film release"
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 22:34, 7 April 2021 (UTC)

Reception

 * The New York Daily News the New York Daily News
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 13:46, 8 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Try removing the use of quotes and [a from b said c] per WP:RECEPTION.
 * I tried doing that for the most part, most reviews I've found seems to be mostly gushing without any serious focus on certain elements of the film (it's so much easier to write these when critics harp on negative aspects of the film, but here people seem to really like this one. The few bits and bobs of negativity don't seem to be consistent either). I've re-phrased the contemporary reviews but I kind of left the retrospective intact as I sort of liked how it went through a few decades of later reception to see reviewers still prasing the film throughout. I'm open to some more specific suggestions if you have any! Andrzejbanas (talk) 13:46, 8 April 2021 (UTC)

Legacy

 * Remove the comma after "future films" and change "story line" to "storyline".
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 14:20, 8 April 2021 (UTC)


 * "To many" should be "Too many" and "To many young people nowadays I am" sounds off on its own.
 * Re-looking at the source, I must have mismanaged some sources here as the book doesn't have a sentence to clarify. I'll re-add it when I can locate it. but for now it can be passed on.Andrzejbanas (talk) 14:20, 8 April 2021 (UTC)


 * In that same sentence, there appears to be missing punctuation at the end.
 * Fixed. Andrzejbanas (talk) 14:20, 8 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Remove the space between the references after "considered it slumming".
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 14:20, 8 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Is "potchpee" an actual word? If she said it, I would put it in quotes and explain what it means. If not, swap it.
 * Yeah, i tried to solve this earlier with no luck. Replaced the word. Andrzejbanas (talk) 14:20, 8 April 2021 (UTC)


 * There are a lot of problems with "terrible.Real B stuff" such as a missing space and sentences that should be combined.
 * Rephrased. Andrzejbanas (talk) 14:20, 8 April 2021 (UTC)


 * In #Remake, the "Borys 2016" reference isn't working for me, as in it doesn't open to an actual source as two sources have the same author/year.
 * Hey. Fixed that name. It shouldnt' have issues now. Andrzejbanas (talk) 19:47, 8 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Also in #Remake, I'm not sure if the quote block is necessary. Do you have a reason to include it?
 * I tightened this down. I re-added the citation to appear at the end of quotes.


 * If you decide to keep the quote, "He compared" should be changed to "Whannell compared" as it followed a quote.
 * Done. Andrzejbanas (talk) 19:47, 8 April 2021 (UTC)

Progress
Hey, I think I've covered everything and responded to some others. Tell me what you think when you are free. :) Andrzejbanas (talk) 19:49, 8 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Combine references [51] and [52] in #Filming, the two sources after "fairy-tale magic", the three references after "must overlap", and the two sources after "slumming". In #Reception, also change "..." to "[...]". After that, ping me, and I'll pass the article.  Some Dude From North Carolina  (talk) 19:59, 8 April 2021 (UTC)
 * , Done! Andrzejbanas (talk) 20:08, 8 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Don't forget the references after "fairy-tale magic" and to change "..." to "[...]".  Some Dude From North Carolina  (talk) 20:11, 8 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Whups! Your are right. Sorry was juggling some tasks. Done now. Andrzejbanas (talk) 20:23, 8 April 2021 (UTC)