Talk:The King of Fighters XIII/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Bald Zebra (talk · contribs) 12:12, 20 March 2013 (UTC)

Hi. Can't believe this has been left for so long without a review! There are a lot of minor issues that need to be addressed before this can be promoted - however, these shouldn't take too long to address so I'm leaving the nomination on hold for a week rather than failing it immediately.

References

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 * Reference #1 is dead - you'll need to find an alternative source as forum posts aren't reliable.
 * Reference #6 is also dead.
 * Check the URLs for references #3, #5, #7, #9, #24, #48, #52 and #58, as these all appear to have been changed.

Lead
 * "...published by SNK Playmore originally in 2010." - remove "originally" from this sentence as it's redundant.
 * "...while ports for the Xbox 360 and PlayStation 3 were during late 2011..." → "...while ports for the Xbox 360 and PlayStation 3 were released in late 2011..."
 * "..., with Atlus and Rising Star Games being in charge of releasing them in the United States and Europe respectively." → "... – Atlus and Rising Star Games were in charge of releasing the game in the United States and Europe respectively." (note the comma has been replaced by an endash to break the sentence up a bit)
 * "2011-2012" → "2011–12" (please note that hyphens shouldn't be used in date ranges - replace it with an endash)
 * "Released after The King of Fighters XII," - this part can be removed.
 * " It follows another King of Fighters tournament secretly hosted by Those From the Distance Land, the organization behind the events from the two prior games that are trying to break the seal of the demon Orochi and take its power." - in the Plot section, the organisation is referred to as "Those From The Past". Which of these is correct?

Gameplay
 * "The game removes some of the gameplay system features used in the prior game: the Guard Attack, the Critical Counter, the Clash System, as well as the dynamic, zooming camera. " - this statement needs a reference.
 * "In their place, three new features have been added." → "Three new features have been added in their place."
 * "The first of the three is the new EX Mode, which convert each character's super moves..." → "The first of the three is the new EX Mode, which converts each character's super moves..."
 * "...that allows one bar..." → "...that uses one bar..."
 * " In addition to standard and EX Desperation Moves," - start a new paragraph at this point.
 * "...a new class of Desperation Move called Neo Max is included in the game and require that three stocks of gauge be exchanged to perform one," → "...a new class of Desperation Move called Neo Max is included in the game ; each Desperation Move requires three bars from the power gauge to perform,"
 * "It also contains a story mode that influenced by the player's actions with various perspectives being available." → "It also contains a story mode that is influenced by the player's actions, with various perspectives being available."
 * "The online gameplay is based on the one included in later versions of The King of Fighters XII, which fixed the issues the initial one had." → "The online gameplay is based on the one included in later versions of The King of Fighters XII, which fixed the issues in the initial version ."

Plot
 * The second paragraph has no references at all, and could probably be split into two.

Characters
 * "...Hwa Jai from Fatal Fury: King of Fighters has been confirmed..." → "...Hwa Jai from Fatal Fury: King of Fighters was confirmed..."
 * "...Mr. Karate (Takuma Sakazaki's alter ego) as a new character became available.." → "...Mr. Karate (Takuma Sakazaki's alter ego) became available as a new character ..."

Development
 * "There was an official preview of the game that was held on March 25, 2010 in Akihabara." → "An official preview of the game was held on March 25, 2010 in Akihabara."
 * "...stated that he wants the game to be played..." → "...stated that he wanted the game to be played..."
 * "Additionally, however," - remove "Additionally" from this sentence.
 * "...though he and his staff's aim for the game is to capture the charm..." → "...though he and his staff's aim for the game was to capture the charm..."
 * "The gameplay was also modified to have faster battles to be enjoyed by gamers. Therefore, Yamamoto labelled the theme of the game as "KOF-ism"" → "The gameplay was also modified to enable faster battles; therefore, Yamamoto labelled the theme of the game as "KOF-ism""
 * "Furthermore, King and Mai Shiranui were made based on their Art of Fighting and Fatal Fury incarnations, respectively, rather than their The King of Fighters ones." → "Furthermore, King and Mai Shiranui were based on their Art of Fighting and Fatal Fury incarnations respectively, rather than their original The King of Fighters designs ."

Release
 * "During June 2011, SNK Playmore confirmed that the PlayStation 3 and Xbox 360 console versions were in the works and would be released on October 27, 2011 in Japan." → "During June 2011, SNK Playmore confirmed that the PlayStation 3 and Xbox 360 console versions were in production and would be released on October 27, 2011 in Japan."
 * "'SNK delayed the game's release date to an unspecified one from the same year,[32] later leaving it to December 1, 2011." → "SNK delayed the game's release to an unspecified date,[32] later releasing it on December 1, 2011."
 * "The ports are notable for adding several game modes not seen in the original version as well as new characters." → "The ports were notable for adding several game modes not seen in the original version, as well as new characters."
 * "...the preorders e notably increased..." - remove the stray 'e'.
 * "...with some of them being originally from..." - remove 'being'.
 * "Downloadable content was also been confirmed..." - remove 'been'.
 * "...but the developed team consisted of another one that did not work in the arcade version." → "...but the development team consisted of members who did not work on the arcade version."
 * "The staff had trouble adapting the game to the iOS due to lack of balances of moves and enemies' intelligences." - apart from needing to be re-written due to its bad grammar and not making much sense in its present form, this statement needs a reference.
 * "Billy Kane was included as a result of his popularity within fans, although some were confused by the absence of Iori Yagami." - this statement needs a reference.
 * "entitled" → "titled"
 * "It is composed of two CDs, with the first one having 15 tracks and the second 37." → "This consisted of two CDs, with the first CD containing 15 tracks and the second CD containing 37 tracks."

Reception
 * "...and a 79 in Metacritic." → "...and 79% in Metacritic."
 * "GameSpot awarded it as Best Fighting Game of the Year[58] and as the Most Improved Sequel.[59]" → "''GameSpot named it as "Best Fighting Game of the Year" and as the "Most Improved Sequel".[58][59]
 * Add a comma before reference #61
 * Move reference #62 to the end of the sentence.

Nice review. As a heads up, the nominator is currently blocked, and based on the reason for his blocking many of these issues will likely not be addressed. As a result I'm closing this early as a failed nom. Wizardman 21:39, 20 March 2013 (UTC)