Talk:The Line (game show)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 17:44, 21 October 2017 (UTC)


 * Grabbing this for a review. Aoba47 (talk) 17:44, 21 October 2017 (UTC)


 * Lead and infobox
 * The image in the infobox should have ALT text.
 * Link ITV Studios in the lead. And I would imagine that ITV Studios should be somewhere in the infobox.
 * I would revise the first sentence of the lead. I would put the information on the co-hosts into its own sentence to avoid making this sentence appear liks a laundry list of information. Then, I would include in the opening sentence what television network that the series was created for (i.e. Game Show Network).
 * I am not sure what is meant by “a progressive jackpot”. Could you clarify this?
 * In this part (or the back, of the line.), you do not need the comma after ‘back”.
 * I am a little confused by this wording (potential contestants). Does this mean that there are people in the line that do not participate in the contest at all?
 * I would break this sentence (While waiting in the line, they may be chosen to perform various challenges which can earn them additional prizes and/or a move to the front, or the back, of the line.) into two as it is rather long.
 * I am confused on why the running time is marked as “42-44 minutes” in the infobox. Since there is only one episode, I would imagine that the running time can be pinned down to one of these numbers in the range.
 * I would include information on the show’s reception in the lead.


 * Gameplay
 * There is a lot of repetition of the word “contestants” in the first and second paragraphs. I would try to avoid this.
 * Is the “outrageous" quote really necessary? And who is referring to these mini-games as “outrageous”?
 * There are a few instances of “games” in the second paragraph and some variation would be helpful here.
 * I do not believe that a comma is necessary before “and offering random”.


 * Production
 * Link GSN in its first instance and spelling out the acronym in its entirety on its first use.
 * You do not need the comma after “Amy Introcaso-Davis”.
 * In this section, you mention it was aired as a two-hour pilot, but the infobox has a runtime of “42-44 minutes” so I am a little confused there.


 * Reception
 * I would try to paraphrase more of the Grosvenor source rather than rely on a larger quote.
 * Do you think it would be worth mentioning the autistic contestant in the lead?


 * References
 * Everything looks good here.


 * Final comments
 * Wonderful work with this article. Once my comments are addressed, I will be more than happy to promote this as a good article. If you are interested, I would appreciate a review for my GAN for Chains of Love (TV series)? I was actually inspired by you to work on a game show-related article. Either way, have a great rest of your day! Aoba47 (talk) 18:22, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks, I believe everything has been addressed (see additional explanations in the edit summaries). Regarding Chains of Love (TV series), I was actually considering it, but as the most active member by far of the Game Shows Wikiproject, I fear it could be considered a conflict of interest for me to give it a review. Still, I am glad to take a look at it and copy-edit if I think it can be improved in any way. Glad to see my own work inspiring others on the encyclopedia! --Bcschneider53 (talk) 18:48, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Thank you for addressing all of my points and for the help with my article. I completely understand your point. I hope you have a wonderful rest of your day. I will ✅ this as a good article. Aoba47 (talk) 20:18, 21 October 2017 (UTC)