Talk:The Look of Love (Madonna song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Beloved  Freak  20:56, 4 June 2010 (UTC)
 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * Some issues, detailed below.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1 dead link
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * No problems here
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * looks pretty stable
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * Image & audio sample look fine
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * No links to disambiguation pages. 1 dead link listed below.
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Lead

 * ""The Look of Love" is a song by American recording artist Madonna..." - I wonder if, just for this song, it might be worth describing her as an actress as well as recording artist, since this song comes directly from a film that she is acting in, it would make those first few sentences a little clearer.
 * Added
 * "Madonna had requested producer Patrick Leonard develop..." - is this missing a word? eg. Madonna had requested that producer Patrick Leonard develop
 * Corrected
 * "Featuring instrumentation from a percussion, the song..." - again, is something missing here?
 * The percussion in the only instrument used here, but re-worded to "Featuring instrumentation from percussions"
 * My point here was that as far as I am aware, there is no instrument called "a percussion". Percussion isn't used as a noun, but as a verb, there are "percussion instruments" including drums, marimbas, cymbals etc. All separate instruments. "Featuring instrumentation from percussion", which you have now is an improvement, but do you see what I'm getting at?
 * "followed by Madonna's expressive voice singing the lyrics." - this is stated as fact here, but later on in the article we see it's one person's opinion. As this is just from one person, I'm not really comfortable calling her voice expressive in the lead
 * Removed
 * Don't think "top-ten" needs a hyphen (eg. compare articles listed at Top Ten)
 * Corrected
 * "Madonna performed the song only once..." - I know what you mean but this isn't completely accurate. Technically she performed it before, to record it, and presumably she performed it more than once on the whole tour. Can you reword this?
 * Better?
 * I've slightly reworded, hope that's acceptable to you

Composition

 * "According to Rikky Rooksby, Madonna's voice sounds "expressive" when she sings the line "From the look of love" and utters the word "look" over the D minor chord present underneath." - As I read this sentence, I'm not sure why it's relevant that the word is "uttered" over the D minor chord. Does that make her voice more expressive? Isn't the whole song in D minor anyway? (I realise there are other chords in it!) I just don't get anything from that second part of the sentence. It doesn't seem tht relevant to her voice sounding expressive.
 * This part is explained in the next sentence
 * Ok, I'm still not loving that, but I won't fail over it.
 * You explain who Rikky Rooksby is in the next section, but that explanation could do with being at the first mention of him.
 * corrected
 * "The word is sang..." → The word is sung...
 * corrected
 * "The word is [sung] in the second note of musical scale, thus giving an impression of the suspension like quality of the minor ninth chord." - is there any way of rewording this a bit to make it a bit easier for the layperson to understand? I know a fair amount about music, but I don't really know what this sentence means.
 * Rephrasing
 * "Madonna's voice spanning from C5 to B♭3" - I don't think this is quite correct, grammatically. I don't think the "from" should be there.
 * "spanning the notes of C5 and B♭3"
 * Again, I've slightly reworded to make (hopefully!) better sense. Feel free to disagree, but "spanning the notes C and B" implies to me that they're the only two notes involved, presumably the notes in between are involved too.

Reception

 * Since this section covers release as well, perhaps it should be Release and reception or something?
 * Confused! This doesnot say about release. Reception implies both critical and commercial reception.
 * "In the United Kingdom, "The Look of Love" was released on December 12, 1987" - Release, no? To be fair, I thought the next few sentences were about release dates but they're not, they're about when it entered charts, so that's ok, but it might be worth mentioning release dates in those countries somewhere. Just a thought.
 * As mentioned above, you explain who Rikky Rooksby is in this section, but that explanation could do with being at the first mention of him.
 * Yup.
 * "...called the song as the album's "other gem"..." - other gem as well as what? What's the other song that's a gem?
 * Added
 * "...commented that "'The Look of Love' was an exotic Madonna/Leonard ballad."" - this is partly redundant & I don't think you need to quote as much as you do. We already know that it's a Madonna/Leonard ballad, the bit that's relevant is that he's calling it exotic.
 * Corrected
 * Just a quick query, if you have the source in front of you, is the actual quote "The Look of Love' was an exotic ballad." (emphasis mine) - ie. in the past tense? If so, fine! If not, commented that "The Look of Love" was "an exotic ballad."
 * "Brian Hadden from Time found the song as depressing." - is somthing missing here? As depressing as what? Or, should it be Brian Hadden from Time found the song depressing.?
 * Corrected
 * When talking about chart performance, the numbers should be either in numerals, or words - make it consistent.
 * Per MOS:NUMBERS, numbers above ten can be written in numerlas, below ten, they can be in words.
 * Yup, that wasn't 100% consistent I don't think. Either you fixed it, or I was dreaming. Just a thought for future development, I have seen this at FAC where reviewers have requested complete consistency between either numerals or words, when they're all in a sentence or a couple of sentences. Especially since in this case you're talking about several instances of the same thing - chart position. I don't have a problem with it for this GA review, but it may come up at FAC.
 * Was it not released in the US? Since it's from an American artist & an American film, it might be worth mentioning that.
 * It wasn't. --Legolas  ( talk 2 me ) 06:15, 7 June 2010 (UTC)
 * That's fine. It might be worth mentioning as a point of interest, but up to you.

Live performance

 * Here you mention Madonna's character as Niki - elsewhere she is Nikki - needs to be consistent (and correct!)
 * "golden lamé pants" - sounds a bit.. magical? What's wrong with "gold lamé pants"?
 * spotlights a common enough word, does it need a wikilink?
 * Corrected all

Credits and personnel

 * Some common words are linked here - overlinking?
 * Corrected all.

References, sources, citations

 * http://www.irishcharts.ie/search/placement?page=10 looks dead
 * I see that ChartStats has been used. I realise that this has been a somewhat controversial source but after reading discussion here, I'm happy for now that this is good enough.
 * replaced

Pass/fail
Overall, this is very close to GA, just some prose issues to fix. I'm putting the article on hold for seven days so that these issues can be addressed.-- Beloved Freak  21:43, 4 June 2010 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the review. Hope I have addressed them all. --Legolas  ( talk 2 me ) 06:15, 7 June 2010 (UTC)
 * That's great, thanks for putting in the work. There are a few outstanding comments/queries but nothing stopping it passing, so I'll let you look over those. I've left some comments stricken so that you can see easily my further comments. Congratulations! -- Beloved Freak  13:53, 7 June 2010 (UTC)