Talk:The Lost Caverns of Tsojcanth/GA1

GA Review
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Comments

 * The image File:S4 Lost Caverns of Tsojcanth.jpg should be reduced in size. It is Fair Use and only used in this article which forces it smaller.
 * A caption of the image, similar to that seen at Dwellers of the Forbidden City would be a useful addition.
 * Two sentences are a little bothersome:
 * After traversing a wilderness and two levels of dungeons, they must defeat Drelzna, the vampiric daughter of long deceased archmage Iggwilv. - "must defeat"? you cannot fail? How about "...of dungeons, the player faces Drelzna, the vampiric daughter..."
 * Monsters appearing in the published version included the demon princes Baphomet, Fraz-Urb'luu, Graz'zt, and Kostchtchie who later appeared in the original Monster Manual II. - please clarify, is it just Kostchtchie who later appeared? or all of them? If all of them please write "...who all later appeared...", if just Kostchtchie separating the clause with a comma may make it more clear.
 * This is a great article on the subject. I compared it with other similar [:Category:GA-Class Dungeons & Dragons articles|D&D GA class]] articles when reviewing. --maclean 07:12, 25 February 2009 (UTC)


 * Thank you. - Peregrine Fisher (talk) (contribs) 06:58, 25 February 2009 (UTC)
 * I'll address those issues tomorrow. Thanks again. - Peregrine Fisher (talk) (contribs) 08:19, 25 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the reivew! :) BOZ (talk) 16:16, 25 February 2009 (UTC)
 * I fixed the above issues. - Peregrine Fisher (talk) (contribs) 19:13, 25 February 2009 (UTC)