Talk:The Manchester Rambler/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 20:05, 16 August 2015 (UTC)


 * Many thanks for taking this on. I'm out of the office until Thursday so will leave any substantial queries until then. Chiswick Chap (talk) 20:48, 16 August 2015 (UTC)


 * singer/songwriter. → singer-songwriter or singer and songwriter.
 * done.


 * The song has since the 1950s → Awkward construction
 * fixed.


 * It has been covered many times, → Give a few examples
 * done.


 * and has been sung both in clubs and in the open air on a variety of occasions. → Any notable ones in particular?
 * done.


 * instead, it was an objective of the hoped-for revolution → You need punctuation at the end here
 * done.


 * Is the block quote starting mid sentence? Is that why it doesn't start with a capital?
 * Yes.


 * songs from America at their camps. → So, American songs?
 * done.


 * setting words like → Find another word for 'setting'?
 * "setting words to music" is the usual way of saying this.


 * who argues that it "marks a departure from the [singer's] leaden-footed and slogan-heavy juvenilia." → This isn't a full sentence, so the full stop should be out outside of the quotation marks. As for any of instances in the article.
 * done.


 * It is also the first song that still survives for which he wrote the tune. → It is his oldest surviving song that he wrote. (wrote the tune is far too informal)
 * Said he wrote the melody as well as the lyrics.


 * Like the tune, → Refrain from using 'tune'
 * done.


 * They put out a defiant political message with "I may be a wage slave on Monday / But I am a free man on Sunday"; play with and update traditional English folksong phraseology with "I once loved a maid, a spot-welder by trade / She was fair as the Rowan in bloom"; and is suitably comical in the style of musical theatre, argues Harker, on the confrontation between the ramblers and the gamekeepers with lines such as "He called me a louse and said 'Think of the grouse'". → This is quite a long sentence.
 * divided.


 * Why have you got two one line paragraphs in Folk song section? Looks a bit odd to separate them from the larger paragraph.
 * There's a paragraph on the song's structure; one on the places; and one on the publication. I doubt if 35 words fit on one line on many people's screens.


 * including for example → Remove 'for example'
 * done.


 * Kirsty MacColl (daughter of Ewan) covered the song on her 1991 album The One And Only.[10] Casey Neill covered it on his eponymous album in 1999.[11] The Houghton Weavers covered it on their 2005 album Sit Thi Deawn.[12] Mick Groves performed it on his 2005 album "Fellow Journeyman".[13] Patterson Jordan Dipper covered it on their album "Flat Earth" in 2010.[14] Danny and Mary O'Leary covered it in 2014.[15] → This reads like a list of hard facts, there's no flow between sentences.
 * linked.


 * The Encyclopaedia of Contemporary British Culture describes Ewan MacColl as "a crucial figure" in the folk revival of the 1950s and 1960s, and names "The Manchester Rambler" as one of his "more famous songs".[17] → Similarly as before, this can be tacked onto the previous sentence.
 * done.

On hold for 7 days. — Calvin999 18:52, 20 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Outcome
 * Great, passing. — Calvin999  07:35, 21 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Many thanks for the review. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:38, 21 August 2015 (UTC)