Talk:The Martian (film)/GA1

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Reviewer: Yash! (talk · contribs) 08:57, 8 May 2016 (UTC)

I will be doing this. Best,  Ya  sh  !   08:57, 8 May 2016 (UTC)
 * Apologies for the delay. I will be over with the review by tomorrow.  Ya  sh  !   16:47, 15 May 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 * Repetition of the fact that Goddard adopted the screenplay. Remove it from either of the mention, preferably from the first mention. Suggestion: merge the fact of adaption in the first sentence, like - "...Matt Damon based on the novel of the same name." ✅
 * Merge the first two sentences of the third paragraph. ✅
 * "629" -> "630" ✅
 * "For his performance" is extra-text and no need to write that. ✅
 * Also, in the last sentence, say "Damon won the Golden Globe for Best Actor in a Musical or Comedy, and was nominated for..." ✅

Plot

 * "without him" - since he was assumed dead, "without him" wouldn't fit alone. Add something else such as "since he was assumed dead" or anything that you would like. ✅
 * "He begins a video diary." - a bit too short. Perhaps merge with the following sentence? ✅
 * Do mention why he starts to make the long journeys. Though it is mentioned previously that the crew would arrive 3200 km away, it would be better to make it clear that he does that to reach that spot. ✅
 * "1997" - is it possible to know how many years ago was that? If yes, do mention.
 * It is not possible, I think. -- Captain Assassin! «T ♦ C ♦ G» 14:08, 28 May 2016 (UTC)


 * "90-sol" -> "90 sol" ✅
 * No need to write "(MMU)" if the abbreviation is not going to be used later. ✅

Cast

 * Unlink "JPL". ✅
 * Use the zh template for the Chinese names. ✅
 * Who were Ryoko and Tim Grimes?
 * I couldn't find about them anywhere and I don't remember their roles in the film. They played very small roles, so we should leave them as they are. -- Captain Assassin! «T ♦ C ♦ G» 13:43, 28 May 2016 (UTC)


 * Unlink "Jet Propulsion Laboratory". ✅
 * Merge the first two paragraphs. Since Damon is the central character here, how he prepared for the role should come first. ✅
 * Potentially due to this, the paragraph reads awkwardly, starting with "Damon prepared for the role by a different method than Chastain" when Chastain's method is not yet mentioned. Reword/organization might be nice 2620:0:1000:2404:9408:18E3:9EAA:E24E (talk) 22:48, 19 May 2017 (UTC)


 * Add "(MANAA)" after "Media Action Network for Asian-Americans". ✅
 * Use Weir's full name the first time it is mentioned in the prose and also link it, in "described by Weir". ✅
 * "Author Andy Weir" -> "Weir" ✅

Production

 * Ridley Scott" -> "Scott". This problem is throughout the section. ✅
 * Andy Weir" -> "Weir". Again, throughout. ✅

Development

 * Avoid repeating "The Martian" in the same sentence. ✅
 * Remove "The studio". ✅

Filming

 * Use the convert template for km. ✅
 * Use years in after Scott's films. ✅
 * Unlink potato. ✅
 * Link UNESCO world heritage site. ✅
 * There is a CN tag. ✅
 * One observer? Observer of? ✅
 * Will be released? Was it? If yes, do mention it there. ✅

NASA involvement

 * JSC and JPL are linked before here as well. Unlink all four of them. ✅
 * Remove "at NASA" while describing Green's position. ✅

Music

 * Unlink Exodus: Gods and Kings and remove "(2014)" as it is already mentioned previously. ✅
 * Film score is overlinked - unlink please. ✅

Marketing

 * No need to mention "Studio". ✅
 * "Matt Damon" -> "Damon". Throughout the section. ✅
 * "Ridley Scott" -> "Scott". Throughout the section. ✅
 * Unlink Prometheus". ✅
 * Unlink astronauts. ✅
 * Unlink NASA. ✅
 * Unlink Johnson Space Center. ✅

Release

 * "Ridley Scott" -> "Scott". Throughout the section. ✅

Box office forecast

 * Remove "in the U.S". ✅
 * "Andy Weir" -> "Weir". ✅
 * "Matt Damon" -> "Damon". ✅
 * Unlink Exodus. ✅
 * Unlink NASA. ✅
 * The tense and grammar in the last sentence can be improved. ✅

Theatrical run

 * "...was also released in 49 markets including the United Kingdom, Mexico..." - why is UK mentioned again after mentioning in the previous sentence? ✅
 * CinemaScore fact should be in the "Critical reception sub-section below. ✅
 * "United States and Canada" -> "North America" - since you already mention what NA means in brackets previously. ✅
 * "In South Korea, it is" -> "In South Korea, it became". ✅
 * Use years in for Avatar and Kingsman. ✅
 * Unlink Spectre the second time. ✅
 * "In its second weekend, it fell by 60% to $13.7 million. In total, it grossed $95 million there." - they can be merged. ✅
 * There is too much usage of "it". Use "it", "the film" and "The Martian" (use less of this though) alternatively please. ✅
 * "as of February 28 has grossed a total of $23.2 million" -> perhaps the final gross would do better. Writing like the final gross was xx$ is preferable.
 * I don't think if that'd do, because the total gross is already mentioned above in the first paragraph. -- Captain Assassin! «T ♦ C ♦ G» 12:47, 30 May 2016 (UTC)


 * "U.S." -> "North America", and if not that, "United States". ✅

Critical reception

 * Mention the overview of the reviews in the opening sentence. Not just about how they were on the premier. Like, "The Martian received generally positive reviews to critical acclaim upon release." ✅
 * "Critics commended the visual effects, the scientific accuracy, and the film's likability, largely due to Matt Damon's performance." - this statement should be the second sentence in this section after the general overview of the reviews and before the RT and MC scores. ✅
 * As pointed previously, add the CinemaScore fact after RT and MC scores. ✅
 * Merge the Variety quote with the first paragraph (which has the general description of reviews just like this quote).
 * I've merged the Variety into The Guardian's paragraph. This should do better. -- Captain Assassin! «T ♦ C ♦ G» 16:13, 19 June 2016 (UTC)


 * The quote of The Guardian is the only one in the paragraph. Perhaps find one more review and add to the paragraph.
 * Merged per above comments. -- Captain Assassin! «T ♦ C ♦ G» 16:13, 19 June 2016 (UTC)


 * Unlink Intersteller. ✅

Accolades

 * About the Top Ten List, can we do it like it is in Intersteller? If not, at least mention which position did the film take in the list and of which publisher. ✅
 * "The film has received many industry awards and nominations" -> "The film received various industry awards and nominations". ✅
 * Remove "but lost in all categories" as it is redundant. ✅
 * A major problem over here - we will need sources for all these uncited claims. ✅

Scientific accuracy

 * "Andy Weir" -> "Weir". ✅
 * "Ridley Scott" -> "Scott. Both the times. ✅
 * "Drew Goddard" -> "Goddard". ✅
 * Use the convert template. ✅
 * "says" -> "said" ✅
 * A reference for "It is also thought possible that microbial organisms could potentially live on Mars." ✅
 * "Dr. Michael Shara" -> "Michael Shara". ✅