Talk:The Milt Grant Show/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 05:39, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

Oo change of pace! I'll review this tomorrow (2 August UTC).  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 05:39, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

Copyvio check
Earwig gives me no concerns.

Prose

 * How about instead of "and aired on" you make it "that aired on" (without a comma) to improve the flow of the sentence?
 * Good call.
 * "WFIL-TV/Philadelphia's" – why a slash?
 * Definitely more of my helper on this one, User:Nathan Obral. Not quite right stylistically here.
 * § Synopsis should really be entitled § Background.
 * Done
 * I am a bit confused on Milt Grant's Record Hop (vs The Milt Grant Show).
 * The name changed by April 1957 and not earlier than the end of January. Added a ref to its first
 * Wikilink ABC.
 * Done
 * Wikilink UHF.
 * Done
 * "Grant went on to a career in independent station management" – I would wikilink independent station here as it is wikilinked in the lead.
 * Done
 * "Washington in 1966 and" – comma before and IMO since the sentence is long.
 * Reworded a bit
 * "his 2007 death" – recommend "death in 2007" for formality.
 * Done
 * Do we have an article on which National Archives it was screening it?
 * Yeah, good catch.
 * I would honestly summarise the Grant National Archives quotation a bit.
 * Done

Refs
Passes spotcheck on refs 2, 8, 13 and 22. Nice work!

Others

 * Reccomend template:use X English (optional)
 * Short description goes at the very top.
 * Fixed

First group of fixes. Awaiting ref checks. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 21:42, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Perfect! Happy to pass. Congrats!  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 23:30, 1 August 2023 (UTC)